Wednesday, February 12, 2014

Valentines Final


21 comments:

  1. Your characters are very cute, and that dress is fab
    I would have liked to see them actually preforming an action either eating that picnic lunch or dancing because he is holding her hand and it looks like they're going to dance. Also I think that if you had gone into the background with a paint like watercolor and made (what I think is a pound) look more finished, this piece would be stronger.

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  2. The dress is really wonderful and the characters are well done. I do feel this is a bit on the cliche side, just pushed back in time. However, I think it is very clearly romantic and does it's job. Parts of it seem unfinished, but as you continue, I think layering more color will help with depth/shadows/etc, especially in the clothing and background.

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  3. The textures on the dress and umbrella are really well done and it appears as if the most time was spent in that particular area, especially when one compares it to the man's suit. I'm not sure how I feel about the white stripe in the background. It seems as if something else was meant to go there, but wasn't inserted for whatever reason.

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  4. This is a really cute piece however I think it really runs the risk of being cliche. The two don't appear to be very in love, so they could be like, dance partners or proper family friends or something. His legs start to get a little lost behind that basket, make sure you're always drawing the whole figure and then drawing things OVER that drawing so you can't use foreground items to get around proportional issues. The dress is lovely and I really like the drawing of the faces!

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  5. I really love both of the characters. It reminds me of a colorized 1800s family photo which adds a lot more story to the piece. I wish the colored pencil for the background was less noticeable but that's a minor gripe. Colored pencil can be a really hard medium to use but I think you're piece is pretty successful.

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  6. The amount of detail of your characters are great and well executed. However I feel such a huge style shift between your characters and your environment and its so abrupt. But your characters are beautiful and very well rendered.

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  7. I think this piece has a lot of potential but more detail need to be resolved in the figures, especially their expressions but I really enjoy the choice to set in a different time period, also I would suggest clearing up the background and bringing forth more value contrast.

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  8. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but the woman appears to be blushing. Maybe this is the most important part of the scene. If so, making her facial expression more "flustered" would help sell the idea. I was first stricken by the beautiful green landscape in the background! I do wish there was something to clarify that the white stripe is a river or what-have-you, but I wouldn't make it a bold color that distracts from the lush green.

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  9. I like the concept but I am not sure that they are in wedding because of color. For me, white color presents the wedding but also can be funeral. I am not sure but I like the background!

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  10. I think their expression can pushed more. Right now they do seem happy but I don’t feel love. Maybe you could make their eyes looking at one another. Also the hands are bit awkward. I am not sure if the female is holding umbrella or not. Also I think the right elbow of female should be fixed. I am not sure what the white area is at the background. Adding detail will help identifying it.

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  11. I see what you were trying to do, and I appreciate the concept, but it's not really doing it for me. It looks like a wedding photo, but then I saw the picnic basket and wondered why they'd be standing there so stiffly at a picnic site. I think it would have helped to do some more thumbnails in the planning phase before deciding on this piece, just because I'm not sure it's conveying the ideas that you wanted it to very well. I do like the texture you picked up on the paper with the colored pencils though.

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  12. I love the this old time dress and suit you chose fore them. it is handled very beautiful and lovely. the face of two figures are rendered so nicely that i hope you put the same detail into the lower right conner.Also so many bright colors are used in background that the two people don't come forward.

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  13. I love the style of their outfits, it seems like they are going on a romantic picnic. I just wish there was more interaction between them. I feel that you could have pushed it more and shown us the entire picnic scene of them enjoying themselves maybe. Also maybe some more colors in the background to help balance it as well.

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  14. I am really impressed with the details of the dress. It's beautiful! I wish there were a more variety of colors in everything. The basket is confusing, for I don't know why it's there. Possibly they are on a picnic? Showing some fruits or food or a blanket that is resting on the grass would be helpful for the viewer. I do not know what the thick streak of white line is at the middle-upper part of the hill but I assume it's a river?

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  15. Bella-- I think you're getting good feedback here. I agree with the previous comments. There's something *missing* from this that I can't quite put my finger on-- it just seems to stop shy of the mark. Your rendering of figures & characters is always quite charming and the period clothing is a nice touch, but they're missing some humanity that I think would've helped. The larger narrative seems to be lacking--- why are they making those faces? are they being photographed? why so much grass!? the pose is so staged… is it meant to be staged? The colored pencil too (as has been said) is, i think, working against them. The color should be knocked back some in the background (a watercolor wash would be great) and remember your Hunger Games piece & learn from it… you've gotta be real careful with local color. If you use colored pencil, treat it like watercolor-- layers of colors to build dimension, not just pressing harder or softer, yeah? I think there's potential here to expand the narrative and give the viewer more room to explore.

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  16. The characters you created are beautiful, as well as the dress. I think their position or setting should be changed so that they look more in love. I had the same problem with my piece. I also find the background and characters to be not cohesive. Perhaps changing it and adding some more colors in the green?

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  17. Awwww how elegant and romantic... Except for the empty food basket and the wild environment they're in! Maybe that's why they look like they're about to leave... They look happy though, so I guess it's all good. I would definitely fix the details on everything except the couple. Maybe the couple just have too much details, they make the environment seem unfinished. So, I would balance the two. But overall, great idea and concept. I like it. :)

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  18. Very cute- I like your color choice and charters- the background is confusing , I'm not sure what the white line in between and the green on top is. - maybe we need more of the scene? The direction of your strokes are also a bit distracting.

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  19. I like the color scheme so far. I like how the female figure's brown hair goes with the green scenery.
    However, the white dress could use some more colorful shadows, like purples and blues.
    It does feel too close to cliche.

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  20. I love how you use the color pencil on the figures I also like the clothing, white dress and the suit it makes
    more romantic. I guess there is something like a pond behind the couple? because the plants is reversed. I think you need to work on it looks more like there is water and reflection on the surface.

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  21. So dainty, mmmm very nice.
    I agree with what's being said above about your characters. Their period clothing looks great! And I can definitely tell that you did your research.
    I'll also agree that the background and setting is just generally need a little bit more. Maybe consider filling up their pick-nick basket? What did they get sent with for their romantic date? Little narrative touches could really help make this that much stronger!
    I also agree with applying a watercolor wash. It's a really quick and easy way of applying color over larger areas (which becomes rather tedious in colored pencil) and would help bring your figures out from the background because they're both dressed in white.
    Separating that foreground and background is really going to help those beautifully rendered characters shine!

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