Wednesday, February 12, 2014

Valentine Final


21 comments:

  1. The shoes in the back are really nicely painted but I don't understand this piece as a Valentines card. The shoes in the front I'm guessing are that persons significant other, but it doesn't really read as love between a couple, if i didn't know what the prompt was.

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  2. I'm a bit distracted by the thickness of the soles in the front shoes, so they seem to belong to someone much much smaller than whoever is wearing the really big boots. I think this confuses your concept too. I also feel like they are awkwardly placed. Like it doesn't seem like two people took off their shoes and set them down naturally, it looks like a still life. Could stand some more context in the background, which might help the confusion.

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  3. At first I thought it was one pairs of shoes. Right now the bottom line of brown shoes and pink shoes are at the same level. I think if you pull the pink shoes little toward the front or down, it will be more interesting. I am not sure if I feel the idea of love. Maybe try drawing shoelaces tied to one another.

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  4. I was going to mention the shoe laces possibly being tied together but It's been stated. Yeah, I'm not entirely sure if I get "valentines" from this as much as I get a father/ daughter piece more. It needs something to allude to a romantic relationship

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  5. I like your approach to the piece in doing a love not between couples. and your use of color is very nice. and aesthetically the shoes are well drawn. however, I feel that the illustration comes off more as a sketch or study. If the shoes had more contrast and mass to stand out more and if the watercolor did not bleed across the lines it could create more emphasis. but its a great idea and a good use of color.

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  6. I am confusing that is a Valentine Day Card or something.
    I want to see more contexts from yours. But I like your watercolor handling and backgrounds.

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  7. I really like the idea of shoes! Although I am reading it as father daughter shoes, I am not sure if that was your intent, but the watercolor is really nice I would suggest bring in hard edges and lines.

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  8. great use of colors and awesome concept! I really like where you're going with this piece! The bottom of pink shoes in the foreground are kind of getting lost but I think you could fix that with some darker shadows under the shoes.

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  9. Interesting concept. I'm not sure if this was the best way of using shoes to convey the idea of love for Valentine's day, but great job at finding a way to make a piece that doesn't play off of the typical trite ideas of love. I just wish this was more rendered out, because it still feels like it's in the sketch phase with all of those pencils lines coming out from under the watercolor wash. Just clean it up a little and it would be really cute.

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  10. I love the detail you put on the shoes in the picture. Also, I got the idea of why you used two different size of shoes, but wish there is more narrative behind these two shoes. are they the shoes of a couple who love climbing the mountain? why did they put their shoes side by side? Maybe adding a background will help with building an context.

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  11. I think this was a very creative set of objects to pick! sneakers arent usually tied to romance! However, I think positioning the shoes a little differently would help. Let the shoes flirt with each other! Right now I get distracted thinking about the woman and man standing duck-footed, spooning, in these shoes. The inner shoes are also floating a bit in my eyes.

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  12. I love your idea of how those shoes can give a lingering moment of love or nostalgia. When I looked at the piece, I saw a man's shoes and a child's shoes. It confused me with our assignment. The child's shoes could be a woman's but I wish there were more clues to show who they belong to. Also the composition looks uneasy because the shoes are in a ballet's plie position. A little more background would help too!

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  13. I'm not entirely sure if I understand your idea, but it may be the love between a father and his child. I think the colors are nicely rendered but need some line work in them to help distinguish them from the background and the other pair of shoes.

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  14. I think adding a background or some more context would help viewers have a better understanding of this piece. It could be a really successful Valentines Day card. I think the fact that you can see the pencil marks makes it look like an almost unfinished piece, cleaning it up would really help.

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  15. Cute shoes! Need more shadows to make them less floaty. The pink ones are romantic looking, and this piece could either read lovers or father and daughter (or people who lives with one another). Either way it's love, so I guess it works...
    I like it, but the idea should be made clearer. Like, maybe intertwining the shoelaces like some other people suggested.

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  16. I thought that this was one pair of shoes, but on further inspection, it's two, which is really kind of brilliant. I think the delicacy of the watercolor works, as well as the colors, and I think the beginning strokes in the background are very interesting, but they clearly need to be fleshed out.
    Another thing to consider might be the relationship you're trying to present: is this a parent/child love or a straight-up romance?
    The diminutive scale of the pink shoes in comparison to the brown ones represent an extreme difference that probably wouldn't exist in a real-life couple.

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  17. Tim-- lovely metaphor here. Lots of great potential. I would agree that the shoes are hard to read as separate objects (thats just a matter of tweaking the drawing and the value ever so slightly) and i think tied together shoelaces, show clearly, so its not confusing that it *might* be a drawing error would be excellent.

    I would vote for different shoes for the (I'm assuming) female character though. The size of the shoe DOES make me think father and daughter… which is fine, but a little off the mark for a traditional valentine. But they also don't strike me as being particularly obvious as a girlfriend's shoe… not that they couldn't be. High heels would be a more obvious (but maybe in that case, obvious is better) option, or even a simple, less pink, flat? Either way, I'd work on your value range and push the shadows a bit more to solidify the objects in space.

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  18. Interesting idea about being paired up with your significant other. I would make the colors stronger and the composition more dynamic.

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  19. Shoes are always very interesting subjects; they can tell a lot about a person.
    I do agree that the shoes seem to blend into each other. Maybe you could've made the pink pair stand parallel to each other.
    I feel like this piece could've benefited with a backround of some sort of bold blocky color, like light blue.
    Because the pink pair looks small in comparison to the other big pair, this feels more like a parental relationship, like a father and daughter relationship.

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  20. The concept is interesting. I wish there is something more than just shoes. And if you were trying to draw
    woman's shoes. You could' ve drawn something more like woman such as heel.

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  21. I really do like where you're going with this concept. It's something so simple, but sweet.
    I do agree with what has been said above about the size difference in the shoes and other aspects such as the handling of the watercolor. Something that could really help tie everything together to make read a bit easier was a sense of environment.
    The space that these are in could definitely speak a lot to the personalities, which I think would make your narrative stronger towards a couple as opposed to a familial relationship.
    But otherwise, very cute, what kind of people don't like shoes?

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