Wednesday, February 12, 2014

Valentine's Day Final Piece

Watercolor and ink

22 comments:

  1. Those kids are so cute, the boy doesn't seem to be enjoying that kiss. Maybe he is shocked? I think I understand what you're trying to illustrate.. the idea that the boy is wishing for this girl to kiss him and then she does and he is shocked. If that's what you were trying to get across good. This piece has a nice feel overall and feels Valentinesy without the super mushy gooshy stuff. I like how you added some dark out lines but I wouldn't outline everything in the scene, for example the tree could benefit maybe from having colored outlines rather than black. It makes it seem more coloring book ish.

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  2. Aw! Kids! I really enjoy your expressions and use of body language, however I think special attention needs to be paid to the anatomy of a child. The girl's face could be handled a bit more elegantly, as she appears to be a much older head on a younger body. Compositionally that springy horse behind her back blends in with her dress a bit too much where I think I'd prefer to just see the nice green grass. Good attention to lighting and very nice shadows!

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  3. I love the pigeon-toed posture of the children, it really says a lot about them. I feel like, as Chelsea said, the spring horse blends into the girls dress, and the see-saw gets a little lost too. I just think they're kind of close together, and not enough of the horse is showing. Maybe putting one, or some other playground indicators on the right of the piece?

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  5. I think that something that could help the blending in with the girl and the boy is the use of color. You could play off of warm and cool tones. Also with the horse. I would say add more indicators as Stephani said or just leave it out. Overall, it's really precious. A nice illustrations of kiddie love.

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  6. What I really love about this piece is that a girl's hand that is clutching a boy's cloth! it is very lovely gesture of a shy girl. light from the back is awesome too, but I think boy's pant is too washed out. since the light is hitting from the back, boy's pants should be dark shad color except for the edge of the pants.

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  7. I think this illustration is cute. The watercolor was handled nicely. The wind can blow objects to any direction it wants, but we can control where the objects may go. I think the dandelion seeds should be placed in a more circular motion so that it would look even more weightless and pop out more. I couldn't tell if the object was supposed to be behind the girl, or a part of her visually. I guess making the object darker would help.

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  8. I really like the concept of this and how most of the colors are done. There's just a little problem with the boy's pants (like everyone had pointed out), the crotch area grabs a lot of attention. Maybe that's what you're aiming for?
    Overall I like it, and would like to see a little blush on them too to make it all cuter.

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  9. SO CUTE, I love expressions and stance of the children and the concept is strong and a very clear representation of childhood love, I think pushing the values in this piece would really push it over the top, but I understand watercolor has its limitations, Awesome Job :)

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  10. This scene is so cute, I love the their expressions and how the little girl is pulling on his shirt, it's a nice touch. I like that you added a background, it has a nice sense of depth and the lighting is great as well. I think the only thing I would say is to either move the figures over to the right more or place the playground setting more to the left, since the horse blends into her dress and gets a little lost to me.

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  11. I like the face and body expression. the most thing I love is the flower seeds. but the issue is perspective. I want to see the composition more dinamic: you could make front flower seeds bigger that we can feel the wind.

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  12. This is a very cute illustration, and the figures are well composed and work well with each other and come off as children. stylistically they are interesting and create a focus. however i believe the harsh greens and yellows of the background compete with the figures. As well the tree and the playground horse seem not as successful as the figure i feel distract the viewer. however the characters are fantastic and fun to look as well as creating a nice narrative.

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  13. I like how the sun shines in the middle, and how it creates interesting shadows in the foreground.
    I would've made the dandelions that are closer to the foreground a lot bigger so you could show that they're not just floating in the grass. It creates depth in the piece.
    The left area of the piece feels cramped. I feel like a see-saw would've been just fine.

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  14. I like the the setting like sun goes down and it makes shadow I think that makes the piece more sentimental. I think the face of boy looks a bit unpleasant than surprised ,but I like the cute characters.

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  15. This is such a cute piece with really nice use of color. My thing with this, though, is that it feels like there's almost too much information in terms of extraneous subject matter that doesn't really help the figures stand out. I agree with the comments about his pants looking off and also his face begins to look wonky as well. I have no qualms with them being outlined.

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  16. I like the face the little boy is making when the girl is kissing him- its very cute/ repulsing .Also nice contrast with shadow and light. I'm a little confused on what the shape behind the girl is- that didn't read as clear. The flowers being blown away look little awkward and stiff-it reminds me of a one flower falling through time instead of a bunch being scattered.

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  17. I do enjoy the facial expression of both figures. It is really cute that the female shows love but the boy refuses it. The background seems bit flat to me. Things that are white, such as spring, socks and flowers should have shadow. I also think females head is proportionally a bit awkward.

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  18. This is an adorable illustration, and the expressions and characters are very well done; the concept is pretty instantly recognizable and relatable.

    I understand that there's supposed to be a sunset in the bg, but the flat, slate blue of the sky and the yellow of the setting sun contrast in a really jarring way. I think it would work a little more smoothly if you tried it with pink or orange?

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  19. the two characters are really cute. You've captured a really whimsical setting. I feel like you could probably get away with making the shadows a little less sharp and less dark (mostly around the bottom)

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  20. Keegan, this turned out really precious!
    I really love that you were able to keep the expressions with the children in this piece, it really helps sell this idea of "young love". The way that you used your colors really suits the mood with these two, and your use of rim lighting helped bring them the forefront of the composition.
    Your watercolor was handled pretty well, it's a bit shaky in a few areas, but generally good!
    The only itty bitty nit-picky thing is I'm still questioning the position of the little girl's arm. I almost want a hand...?

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  21. This is very adorable and your line work is beautifully handled! It certainly conveys an appropriate love story without alluding to Valentine's Day. I have just some minor concerns with this. I think the playground pieces on the left should be moved or left out because they are running into your main subjects and the edge of the image. I would also be careful to clarify that the boy didn't just wet his pants. Maybe manipulating the shadow a little or changing his leg position would help.

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  22. I agree with the above and would add a couple "food for thought" type things to it as well-- there seems to be a (I'm assuming unintentional) amount of attention drawn to the boy's crotch. the one dandelion spore thingy looks heavy and like its whacking him there… and the lighting/ heavy shadow almost makes it look like he wet his pants.

    That was my first read of this and I have a hard time un-seeing it.

    I think her posture is weird and the tugging on his shirt (?) is a little awkward. They feel clumsier than the environment they are in, but i think you have feedback above that will help address that. the watercolor WAS nicely done for the most part-- so thats something to be proud of for sure!

    the left side, in general, is competing too much for attention. I keep reading that spring ride thing as like a cape or something on the girl.

    maybe a little less pen/ outline in the future and let backgrounds actually fall back more?

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