Wednesday, February 12, 2014

Valentines Final


Hi, so I scanned it again cause I realized I had kind of a crappy one before.


21 comments:

  1. I like this some much more than your sketch idea. It's like you stuck with the quote if you're a bird than I'm a bird" from the movie and kid of placed them in that one scene of the movie when they're out on the boat before it rains. But you made it so that even those who haven't seen the movie can understand this and enjoy it as a Valentines card. "Love birds" The way that this piece was done is very nice, has a nice soft look to it which the concept is a soft idea in itself. It looks like watercolor and color pencil. This is a cute idea!

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  2. oh this is way cute. Your watercolor is beautiful and well handled! I really like your color scheme and the message is super clear. I might suggest darkening the boat a little because it sort of blends with the color of the birds but that's really nitpicky. Overall beautiful!

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  3. I think your message is much stronger than it was in sketch phase. And the watercolor is really well done, I love the sense of light, especially the attention you paid to the shadows of the trees. I do wish there was a bit more texture to the birds, but otherwise, really nice!

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  4. I know other people already said this a lot, but I think you really did a good job of improving your initial sketch! the reflection on the water is very nice and even the water waves are depicted very nicely. the only think I wish for this piece is maybe little more contrast between foreground and the background so that this boat and ducks can pop out little bit more?

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  5. I personally love this illustration. The use of color pencils is beautifully done. But I'm not sure if it went along with the assignment, since the illustration shows 'two lovebirds'. I wish there were more shadows to the boat and pigeons; they look like they are made out of paper. Other than that, I think it's beautiful!

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  6. If you're a bird, I'm a bird!

    When I first saw your sketch, I got what you were going for, but I was worried that it wouldn't click for some people. I'm glad that you changed the idea around to make the idea of "love" a little more obvious.

    I like the handling of the paint for the most part. That shadow come off of the boat in the water is nice. I'd like to see more contrast though, and more light shining between the trees to really make the shadows and silhouettes of the trees pop on the page.

    Nice work!

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  7. hahah this is great! I love the concept. You handled the watercolor really delicately which really works well with the concept, one suggestion I have would be maybe trying to add texture to the birds.

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  8. I really like scenery and atmosphere you created, the doves and the background are innocent and romantic. There's just some minor details you can easily fix, like making the boat slightly a different color than the doves to make the doves pop out more. And the male dove is like "i have no idea what i'm doing." Haha.
    Overall, very cute and pretty, I like it. :)

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  9. Your final work is much more lovely that the previous sketch! I like the soft lights and tone of watercolor. I would like to see more romantic moods such as sunlights or beautiful small butterflies?

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  10. This is a wonderful piece and it is very nice to see such a huge jump from your sketch and your use of color is used very well with the boat and the water it is a very pleasant illustration to view. I only wish there was a little more contrast between the foreground and background to separate the two. Its a great illustration.

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  11. I definitely think this idea is a lot more stronger than your initial sketch. I get the concept right away and I love the softness of it. The lighting is really nice, I think darkening up some areas would be helpful, like the water and the trees. Also since the birds are looking at something in the water, I feel like something should be added in there, like a fish or a water lily.

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  12. The pigeons look very cute and stylized. This is a good take on the assignment.
    The color scheme seems a bit too similar in tone. Maybe warming up the sun or cooling down the water or other areas would've made the piece pop out more.

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  13. I think this is really lovely idea. I like how you identified the gender of two birds with one object. I wish to see more tree branches. Also right now all the trees have same amounts of space between each other. It would be more interesting to see trees overlapping, or one that is far apart from other trees.

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  14. This is such a nice piece and I agree that the medium is really nicely handled. I really like the calm and quaint feel it has to it and I also love the way you were able to distinguish the genders of the birds with simple and minimal extraneous accessories. The one part of this I'm not buying is the when the tree trunks meet the water, I'm just having a hard time believing that it's really water in those specific areas.

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  16. cute concept, I like the idea- instead a cliche of two people in a boat, you used two love birds. The picture seems a bit dim- i would show more contrast to really bring out the romanticism of the sunset.

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  17. I think its beautifully done. I really like the calm color palette.Pigeons are really cute but I think it would be nicer if they are facing or other action because its a bird its hard express the emotion from them. I also love that it seems to have story.

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  18. This is so lovely! It's soft and evocative, and it's really romantic too. The birds are adorable, and they fit perfectly in their environment. Maybe, if you wanted to, you could add more detail to the swamp, but I'm not entirely sure that's necessary.

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  19. The color and handling of light in this is great! "What a Wonderful World" is absolutely playing in my head right now. This is much better than your original sketch which relied on a movie too much. It mightve been nice to see a more unusual animal used, but I don't think the swans are too cliche for this. I do wonder if having the boat be just slightly off white would help make the characters pop. Or possibly outlining the swans in a different color.

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  20. Hey there, this is a really lovely application of watercolor!
    I definitely like this final iteration of your concept of love. It works with the idea of the Notebook (for those who understand it), but appeals to the thought of "love birds".
    Your handling of color and lighting is very delicate and soft, and it sells this gentleness and mood.
    The characterization of the birds is so very precious.

    A few final picky things.
    Firstly, I wouldn't mind seeing more grasses in and around the water. Right now they're mostly centered around the trees in the water, and that really flattens out your piece, which is a shame because all of the great tone in your piece. Having some more grasses closer to the "camera" would really help expand on the space.
    Lastly, this is super picky of me, but I almost want to see more branches in the trees. Right now none of them really have any branches or foliage to speak of which helped maintain your quiet and peaceful composition. But partly I just want one or two branches? Just to help fill up the variety that you helped establish with their widths.
    Otherwise, very sweet.

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  21. oh geez thats adorable.

    ok, so you had me with "birds". And then you had me again with Ryan Gosling… Im in. You win.
    :)

    I love the color and the sensitivity of it all. I think you made excellent use of the media and its overall quite nice. I would agree with amanda on some of that "nit-pickiness"… I think its easily fixable and worth fixing though, for sure.

    for me, though, the biggest problem is I can't say for sure which direction the male bird is supposed to be facing. They look like doves, sorta, which makes my brain say the male is facing the female and his belly is towards her… but then I can also make myself see them as geese, which would mean longer necks and would support my brain's idea that he's actually facing away from her, but has turned his head back to look at her. You'll fix it by paying attention to the wings. The inside of a bird's wings is actually designed differently than the outside. The feathers lay differently, because they grow out differently. The curve of them now makes it look like we're seeing them from behind (so, the outside of the wing) but that makes his "back" not make sense as a back and his neck/ head seem weird.

    So just check on that!

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