a collection of work by 1st and 2nd semester sophomores
I am a little confused about what message you're trying to illustrate, I read it as a mother (ghost) looking at a daughter who is reading valentines day cards? I like the way the girl is drawn and her shoes are very nice. I like the blanket/fabric is painted really nice.
This feels a little creepy to me. I think that her whole body should have been drawn, because I think you achieved a nice transparent/ghost feel, so her being cutoff at the waist isn't needed. Also I wish the mother was either ruffling the kid's hair looking pleased/sad, or just being slightly more intimate. Because it feels a little stiff when I think there is a lot of emotion you could fit in this piece. Also, nicely painted and the color scheme definitely lends to it.
I think attention needs to be paid to the facial structure of the girl. She looks a little angry maybe? Also consider the use of dark lines on her face (like her smile line) it ages her a lot! I'm not quite sure what her legs are doing or what her body would look like behind that table. I definitely get a valentines day vibe from this piece, though! good job conveying motherly love.
This piece is a little confusing because I'm not quite sure what to read from it, or the message it's giving off. The woman is ambiguous as to who she is and what she represents. The girl's legs are also positioned in a way that makes it seem like her body is very stretched and elongated, which should be considered in the future.
Since it was for the Valentine day's card, I think it is giving little confusing message. Also, I am not sure what she is holding in the picture.. is it a photo of her mom or letter? I hope you have a little bit more detail to make that clear! I really love the rendering of a girl, and color palette you chose:)
The fabric is done really well, I also like the color scheme although the green shirt and the black ball shoes makes me read christmas elf, as far as concept I am reading a mother figure looking over her daughter but its hard for me to separate christmas from my thoughts.
This is a very emotional piece and I read it quite well and is narratively quite well done. however I have a little issue with the color it feels a little out of the tube and a bit to saturated. However I like your character and find her delightful to look at.
I am not sure that is "Valentine" because the mood is little bit out from the concept. That feel creepy to me. I see the word "love" but that looks not fit with Valentine. I want to see your more work with the "valentine words"!
The application of the paint is really nice, and so are the colors. The concept for this is kind of confusing. I have an idea of what I'm looking at, but I'm not really sure. It should be a little bit more obvious what the character is looking at in the box because it's not really clicking with me. The angle of that hand on the table seems off as well.Side note: This doesn't have anything to do with anything, but the little girl's face is reminding me a lot of the Good Guy Doll from Child's Play aka Chucky
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this is an interesting idea. I think I understand where you're going with this but I feel it might need some more clarification. I feel like the characters are really well made but you might want to add some more stuff to make the message more clear.
I almost forgot about those boxes that everyone has in school for Vday as a kid. That seems like the most important connection to valentines day in this compoisition and I wouldn't mind having some distractions cut out. Even if the mother were to stay, i would want to cut out the shoes so I could see the cards and the girls reaction better.
I love your use of color and style. The way you made the ghost look like a ghost is convincing. However, I am confused with the concept/theme of this illustration. I don't see a connection with this and Valentine's Day. What I could interpret is that a girl is reading letters she had when her mother was once alive, but she is now gone. It's actually sad than a happy view of what love is.
I like how you used green color on the main character to get attention. I do think red color is used to much. Just like others I am also bit confuse about the concept. Also I think girl’s feet are too much towards right side.
I like that you decided to take on a different kind of love, but I think it needs to be pushed a little farther. I'm not sure if knowing that the woman is the girl's mother is clear enough. Perhaps a similar hairstyle with both figures would help?
I love the colors, and the concept reads well to me. Expect I don't really understand the ghost mom as well as I want to. It reads as a very emotional piece, so I get motherly love from it as the girl opens up her valentines. I think one thing I would change is the table, since it seems to be way shorter than it should be and that may help to make sense out of the legs as well. C:
Well that's not I expected.There's definitely some love vibe going on there, but it's either hidden or platonic. Great colors, they indicate a romantic atmosphere right away. I like how you did the red cloth on the table. And just like how everyone has been saying. There's too much stuff that's going around to get the intended message. Did someone die? What is that little girl sitting on? What is she holding? What is this? What is that? Overall, It's a great illustration if I knew the meaning behind it. Very well drawn though!
Kudos for choosing a very different angle for this project! I think the concept illustrates itself fairly well. I like the way you cropped this piece, and the fabric looks great. I'm only confused by the way the ghost mom dissolves into mist directly at her torso in a straight line. It draws the eye away a bit too much, so trying a more natural fade would probably work a lot better.
Julianne-- as others have already said, there's a nice (but maybe a little too off the mark) narrative starting here. We didn't really discuss this, so it makes sense that some folks are interpreting "valentine" as being something beyond love between partners. My parents certainly gave me a card for Valentines Day. My son just got one from his great grandma (though… i didn't, hmm). So I don't *generally* have an issue with a card that might be given to someone for whom you have non-romantic love. That being said, the image is a little dark (some have said "creepy") for its own good, i think. The girl's face is confusing emotionally & the mom (if she is meant to be dead) could be better and more artfully depicted, I think, by her absence. In other words, if you zoomed on on the girl, at her desk, clarified the face and really allowed us to see the contents of the box, we'd be able to piece together a more cohesive story, I think. The "ghost" isn't necessary and takes away from the Valentine-y-ness of it (even though it is a very sweet rendition of the word Love). Imagine this as a card on the shelf at Hallmark… what would need to be different? That might be a good place to start.
This is a very different take on the assignment. I like how you made a vertical composition.The cloth on the table and the curtains is really good.There are perspective issues with the girl's legs. I can't tell if she's sitting down, or standing or kneeling.I feel like the blue amulet is an important aspect of the piece so maybe you could've added some blue in the ghost. There's a bit of an awkward and a very bold crop in the ghost. Maybe you could've gradually blended the colors at a diagonal.
Interesting to see the ghost but I want to know about the story in it. I like the details of curtain. I like the way to depict the wrinkles on the curtain.I was confused with a girl's pose if she is sitting or standing. And the Ghost(mother?) is little bit scary to me I think because she is cut off from her belly andshe doesn't have a left hand.
Motherly love is something that's pretty unique, and pretty sweet. I'm going to agree that I enjoy your colors throughout the piece. Using those pinks and purples proves to be difficult, but where you placed them helped bring some dimension to the space. Unfortunately I'm a bit confused at where her box is sitting. With the cloth draped over it, sometimes it reads as a bed. But where it bisects the girl, I'm confused at the positioning of her legs, so I'm not sure if she's sitting or standing up.I would suggest if you'd like her standing at a table, extend the table's legs down to where her shoes meet the floor. If she's seated, I'd like to see more of the bottoms of her shoes.I don't think that you need to hide your character! She's so interesting, and I'd love to see her personality and gesture shine through.