a collection of work by 1st and 2nd semester sophomores
I'm not sure the speech bubble is necessary. If the drawing and talk for itself let it. This is a much more intimidating twist to your previous idea! But I think it works, however, I would like to see some background the black burst behind the desk seems to end pretty abruptly leaving me without a good sense of space or place.
I think some more background would be nice because he looks like he is surrounded by flames. Unless that is what you are going for. Since it is a tiny bit confusing I would add more to explain
God is SCARY! ok I'm just kidding, um I like the character and the main elements, but I do think it would work better if the entire background was black. It would make the speech Bubble and the halo stand out more, as well as make god seem less confined. Gates would be nice too! i like that element in the previous sketch.I absolutely would not expect god to look like this if i met him
also I think hes drinking a beer right? you should define it as beer more clearly because that would add to the unexpectedness
Yea, I agree with the beer comment. Have some forties littered around the ground or something?other than that, i think the concept works well... Maybe just make the flames fan out more violently.The text of his speech could be a bit stroner.Cool nameplate.
not stroner, i meant stronger.sorry, stroner sounds like scrotum.
I like the way you used shapes of black and white to define god, but i agree that maybe there should be more definition in the background
I agree with defining the beer. I think adding gates from the previous sketch would add to the the effect and you might not need GOD text.
It would be better if you lessen the black shades in the face and be economical but effective. Actually I don't really understand what the words bubble is saying. It might be better to put more textures in the fire since it dominates large portion of your illustration as the background.
The only thing i would suggest is to make the background more flamey, maybe add some highlights to it to give it that effect and have them burst out more. The ideas really cool, kinda intimidating.
I like the idea of flames framing the figure. He could use a little stubble to go along with his beer. ;) I also think the "name?" could be a little more legible.
i think you need to define the "name?", like bolder lettering or something. i think some sort of texture in the background would really help the piece. also the beer thing, yes. but so far i think your handling the light and the shapes pretty well.
I like the character and the desk. It's pretty clear except the paper, beer, and fire...I wish that the fire would look more like a flaming fire.
I think this is nicely done, I would just work on the paper and beer can a little more. I agree with Lara that the speech bubble isn't necessary. If you do decide to keep it anyway, I would work on the text style/font.
I agree that it needs more fire and I'm entirely sure if I like what the speech bubble is doing, though I really like the font, maybe if the flames were more pronounced they could go around the text and pop it up more.
Matt-- Ditto the above; if you are going to have him asking for the Name, the font needs to be more committed-- not only a bolder line, but a much more appropriate typeface. What font is what that kind of god would sound like? As for the image itself-- its a little floaty/isolated. It needs a background. Dont feel like you need to make it a cut out just because you are limited from greys. Go back to your original image and give him a sense of place. Your classmates have some good ideas for you. *Dana
I like the concept but think it could be better illustrated if we could see more of god's body. Maybe it's a choice of style to cut out the body, but I think the idea would be clearer to include more torso. It took me a few seconds to see the overalls which were a nice touch.I'm also not sure about the background. They look like flames which is associated with devils. That may have been your intention but I'd like to see more of a heavenly look. Other than that, nice use of shapes.
I was definitely not reading "name" for a long time there. Clarify the text, or leave it out entirely. I like the image, but I agree that there should be more going on in terms of a background. Or maybe not. Perhaps just a re cropping would solve some of the unused space issues.
I agree with others who have said that the speech bubble is unnecessary. The drawing totally reads without it.I kinda like the background as it is, but maybe some pearly gates would kick it up a notch?I want this on a t-shirt.
I think the drawing reads without the speech bubble as well. I also think the flames should fan out more in the background. I really like his face though! It's very intimidating.
It's a great character, and you're using the technique really well! He just needs an environment, make heaven more like hell!