a collection of work by 1st and 2nd semester sophomores
Right now, everything is defined by lines, I wish I could see more soild shapes of dark area or little bit more contrest. perspective isn't really right (especially the pen that the guy is holding), but everything is slightly worng so, I guess it doesn't really bother me, it looks like the style. (I actually kind of like it)I think you captured the narriative feeling really well.
i think this works really well as a piece actually. The warped space is intereting and your characters are fluid and seem to have personalities. the only thing i would suggest is maybe a solid area of black somehwere to break up the greyness of the background?
I like the skewed perspective looks very stylized. The mans left arm bothers me
i think the piece would function twice as well if you just kicked in some really dark shapes in the back. like on top of the fridge, and in that large grey space behind the man.it just doesn't get quite dark enough. and some intense darks next to the figures would help them pop more too.
Everything is sort of a mid tone right now. The white helps bring things forward but don't be afraid to shade and add value to certain objects with both b&w. maybe think about coloring the wife beater, the fridge and the eggs, white. and adding black to shadows.
I definitely agree, right over the man's left shoulder some black space would really complete the composition I think. I like the position and gesture of the girl, but the man's seems a little forced. I think it's the fact that his arms are sort of unrealistically bent, while his torso and legs are just like, straight as a board. Otherwise, I think it works really well as an image overall.
I'm digging the composition and line dude. I'd just push the contrast more to draw the eye in. So more lights in the foreground elements with the people and stove, and darker blacks in the background.
More contrast would definitely help the piece..right now there's only two tones, gray and white..adding some darker darks would make it seem less washed out, and could really add to the narrative, which is already interesting.