a collection of work by 1st and 2nd semester sophomores
i think this idea has the potential to be awesome but i dont think its quite there yet, you should consider a really bright light source like from the top or something and get some shapes into the faces of these characters. i really like the rendering of your characters so i think they could use some more thought.
Looks like you haven't quite finished yet but It's a good start, I would probably crop it in a bit on the left and I miss the lovely environment you had in your first sketch. looking forward to the final.
I really liked the setting you had in your initial sketch. It think it could work well in this if you just broke it down into shapes. I like the figures but I feel like they could use a bit more shadows or definition on the faces. Its looking good, can't wait to see the final.
I like how the guy in the forground has no eyes cause he reminds me of one of those people who would look down his nose at someone. Maybe define the guy in the background a little more, give him some shadows and possibly on the wineglass too so that it looks more reflective.
I think you could use more shadows to describe the facial features of the two people. the concept is really good but there are some whites that blend in with other whites and some blacks that blend with the blacks. U should find a way to separate some of your figures
ooh, maybe just move the waiter to the left a bit, no cropping necessary and then his pants won't bleed into the patron's jacket
If you elaborate it more with details, it would be much better.
Explore the lighting more in the faces and the wine glass. Other than that, i really like what you've done.
I do agree that the faces should have a little more definition and a light source would help that. I do like the simple white sillouette of the waiter against the bold black window panes. =)
I think if you work on the faces a bit more it'll be a great piece!
Details on the face and shirt of the men in the back and on the glass and hand will be good! Nice piece!
greg-- you may not get feedback from everyone on this, since it didnt get posted until after 6:30, but the feedback you've gotten so far is good and valid. I like the basic gist of it-- but for a "Final Sketch" it feels incomplete. This assignment in particular, is about shapes and how shapes interact, so its very important to look, for example, at how the two characters blend together. How you'll indicate faces without relying on line, but instead shape (undersides of jaw/meets neck, for example) or how to separate hands from glasses, from arms etc. I'd definitely spend more time with this idea and make some adjustments before you move to final. you should be able to put this piece on its side or upsidedown and still have a balanced image-- in terms of black and white and break up of space and shapes. also-- is the character inthe front aware that snakes are coming out or no? glass full or empty? is he laughing? all questions to answer. good start!*dana
the front character is great, i think that the faces are gonna turn out fine but maybe do a little something with the floor?
It does look incomplete, especially after having been so charmed by your original sketch! It needs more story to it, or it needs the story put back into it. It seems like you're being a little too careful with the solid black and white rules. Mess up a little, and pull it back when necessary!
I like this idea a lot but I agree that if you accent the details a little more it could really move the eye around better
I enjoyed the sketch of this better, I think it is a good idea, but the concept somehow gets lost in this, bring out the charm that the sketch had, or possibly boost the alarm of the snakes popping out