Tuesday, February 9, 2010

Positive/Negative

Sean FitzPatrick
I outlined all the white shapes in my sketch and colored it in photoshop to get a solid black.
I'm also going to straighten out the board and the wall in the final.

19 comments:

  1. The perspective's a little wonky, but I think it works for the piece. The composition is a little centered, and also awkward because there's so little room in the direction he's facing. You could try adding a little more of the classroom on either side.

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  2. I think the piece's distortion is great. I would probably make the F on the paper a bit lager to implicate his massive amount of shock.

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  3. I like the character you created. I think you worked on silhouette of the shirt really well. But the perspective of the background and tables is little bit weird. The floor line seems slanted.
    Also, you could put more tables in the left back since it seems empty.

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  4. Gotta say, I like this one. It clearly illustrates the prompt and your sense of shapes and negative/positives is good. I'm wondering if the sketch is just pencil because the blacks look too dark to be graphite. Only thing that bugs me is the anatomy of the figure.

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  5. I really like the character you made. Its kinda hard to make out the F on the paper. Maybe you could make it a bit bigger? The perspective is a lil weird but it works with the other distortions.

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  6. I like this a lot, but I'm not sure if I like the perspective distortion. I suppose it's a hit-or-miss element that just draws different people different ways. The character looks great, though!

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  7. Something dark on the upper left hand corner might be good for balance... a bigger F would probably help.

    But this one definitely fulfills the prompt in a frank manner.

    yea

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  8. Oh my god.. it's F
    but the expression of the men seems not that shocked. He even seems like his getting failing grade several times. That's why I like about this piece. But I think it's better to change the position of the board and desks to the left side of the character to give more information that he is in the classroom

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  9. The character is cool and works well with the space he is in, i agree that the F should be bigger on the paper also

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  10. Looking good, much prefer it to your previous sketch. Bold the F and don't bother straitening things out, the skew is working to your advantage. If you wanted you might add some other people in the class room? perhaps with good grades or happy faces? He looks so lonesome.

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  11. I think the "F" needs to be bigger and bolder. Maybe he could be at his desk? I don't know but i think the lower left hand corner is too empty. I really like the distortions and the character.

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  12. i agree with the big F comment. i like the angle of the classroom, i dont mind that its wonky. i like your characters expression. i want there to be something else hanging on the wall on the upper left hand corner to break up that space, but its not necessary.

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  13. Really good, maybe mess with the line thickness on his face a little more to add depth. i like the strange perspective.

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  14. I love the shapes and over all amount of black and white you used, I would however make the guys eye a bit bigger or different, good job!

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  15. i really like the use of white and black in the characters jacket. I think you could do more shading like that in some other areas. I like your decision to get rid of that chair that was in your original sketch and put desks and a chalkboard in the background. It shows that it takes place in a classroom without any images getting in the way. Overall it is a strong peice with a good balance of light and dark

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  16. Great job placing the blacks and whites. It really feels natural. Also, I like the way you're abstracting all these shapes.

    I love his tiny hand up there. That strangeness is really the best part of your style.

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  17. The "F" should definitely be darker too add a bit more punch to the piece. I really like the style on the character though, and the perspective issues don't bother me much.

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  18. Excellent balance of black and white, but free yourself up a little more from use of the thin black lines in the face and hand! You can do the same things with shapes, just visualize it. Also experiment with merging white shapes a little while keeping them distinct, don't feel like everything has to be completely sectioned off all the time.
    His design is great, I especially like his eye. Definitely make that F bigger, or even make it something a little more surprising instead of just an F!

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  19. Sean-- THIS character is perfect. This guy should be the mark against which you hold other "weird, but believable" guys in the future. The hand on his head, however, isnt working for me bc its different than the one holding the paper. I'd re-draw it to look like it belongs to teh same body. Its ok for there to be wonkiness and a quirk in your characters but the quirks need to be consistent throughout. Right now, it looks like a drawing error.

    I'd also, in addition to adjusting the perspective, move the wall-meets-floor line down a bit so it isnt itersecting his hand/head where it is now. thats adding to the hand looking disembodied.
    I dont hate the wonky floor here-- but the fact that it hits both hands and the desk so close to the line makes me uneasy.

    and like everyone has said, really accentuate that F!

    *Dana

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