Great patterning in the bricks and chainmail. You might want to define the priest's shoulders from Thor?'s abdomen though, it gets a little confusing. try widening the shoulder or the body, or even off-setting the two figures by just a little.
This is a fun sketch view. I love the effect of the chainmail, I think that if you could continue with this type of pattern in the piece it would be great. Also maybe you should add more contrast between the sky and the bricks because they seem to blend into each other
I want to see a missing arm of the viking... even a little bit of it. But the attackers seems very evil which, I guess, is intentional. I also like the patterns of the brick wall. coool
I agree with Chelsea about the brick wall blending into the sky. I'm not sure if I like the halo of white around all of the figures. It seems to be more "godly" and perhaps should be reserved for the god-like figure in the center. Other than that I love what you did with the chain mail and all of the patterning! The concept is great, as well.
The way you used patterns with the assignment work really well for your piece and give it character. I agree that the sky blends in to much with the wall though
This is the only piece I have seen so far that I think could use a little less background; it seems like you want us to know that it is set in Asgard(yes?) but I think you should push the epic comic book feel and put all the emphasis and effort into the main characters. I'd pull a rob liefeld and let a lot of the distracting background detail go. Focus on defining the priest a little more as well? took me a while to see him. well done
Is Thor about to kill a priest? ha You did a good job seperating the characters in such a close position, but I agree with Holly that you should define the priests shoulders a bit more because it took me a minute to distinguish him from Thor. Also a white line at the top of the wall would help seperate it from the sky.
Also I'm not sure what the shape is thats coming from the moon or planet onto the towers...
I think the two towers in the background could use some sort of texture or shadow. Overall, I really like this piece, and the use of patterning was really smart.
I really enjoy this composition and over all patterns, I don't think the white strip leading the planet to the castle is necessary though, it also kinda takes some emphasis off the characters in the foreground.
I think that you could put more shadows within the thor figure rather than just blocking it out black. i like the pattern you use to communicate the chain mail texture and i think you could do more of this in your piece to make it more impressive
Epic. Separating Thor's body from the priest is a must, but the chain mail (scale mail?) is nicely done. I like the brick pattern, but the spacing between them may need to be reduced a bit. Love the idea, though.
assuming i dont know the story, these characters or why this is unexpected, here are my suggestions---
try to look at this as objectively as possible-- look at it now, not as narrative, but as black and white Abstraction. How do these shapes fit together? do they fit?
theres a lot of info here, but the overall narrative seems to be taking place right down in the front center, so you want to shift our attention there, away from the setting youve created, and down to "what really matters".
the "Thor" character is one armed--- intentional? where is the missing arm? did he just lose it? I wouldnt have those questions if the figures were a little more isolated and didnt share so much of the same space/ overlap. Your classmates suggestions for separating them out a bit is a good one. I love the patterning though. I'd agree that Thor could use a little more of something to break him up a bit. *dana
The drawing is very good, but the narrative and sectioning of black and white shapes is slightly confusing. I have the same questions everyone else did about the story, and the arm - who's the fourth figure in the middle? Do you need the two figures on either side to get the point across? What IS the point? I do disagree with the comments citing the wall blending into the sky as problematic, though. I like seeing the pattern of the wall end right up until the area of the sky. It simplifies the background in a good way, just make it more intentional.
Great patterning in the bricks and chainmail. You might want to define the priest's shoulders from Thor?'s abdomen though, it gets a little confusing. try widening the shoulder or the body, or even off-setting the two figures by just a little.
ReplyDeleteThis is a fun sketch view. I love the effect of the chainmail, I think that if you could continue with this type of pattern in the piece it would be great. Also maybe you should add more contrast between the sky and the bricks because they seem to blend into each other
ReplyDeleteIts classic I like it. You could exaggerate the thunder effect to give more impact to the piece.
ReplyDeleteWauw. This is amazing. I just want to see this huge. Like, 10 stories tall huge. Yea?
ReplyDeleteI want to see a missing arm of the viking... even a little bit of it. But the attackers seems very evil which, I guess, is intentional. I also like the patterns of the brick wall. coool
ReplyDeleteI agree with Chelsea about the brick wall blending into the sky. I'm not sure if I like the halo of white around all of the figures. It seems to be more "godly" and perhaps should be reserved for the god-like figure in the center. Other than that I love what you did with the chain mail and all of the patterning! The concept is great, as well.
ReplyDeleteThe way you used patterns with the assignment work really well for your piece and give it character. I agree that the sky blends in to much with the wall though
ReplyDeleteThis is the only piece I have seen so far that I think could use a little less background; it seems like you want us to know that it is set in Asgard(yes?) but I think you should push the epic comic book feel and put all the emphasis and effort into the main characters. I'd pull a rob liefeld and let a lot of the distracting background detail go. Focus on defining the priest a little more as well? took me a while to see him. well done
ReplyDeleteIs Thor about to kill a priest? ha
ReplyDeleteYou did a good job seperating the characters in such a close position, but I agree with Holly that you should define the priests shoulders a bit more because it took me a minute to distinguish him from Thor. Also a white line at the top of the wall would help seperate it from the sky.
Also I'm not sure what the shape is thats coming from the moon or planet onto the towers...
I think the two towers in the background could use some sort of texture or shadow. Overall, I really like this piece, and the use of patterning was really smart.
ReplyDeleteMaybe put some highlights on the muscles and some shadows on the castle to give the illusion of brickwork. Other then that, really good.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy this composition and over all patterns, I don't think the white strip leading the planet to the castle is necessary though, it also kinda takes some emphasis off the characters in the foreground.
ReplyDeleteI think that you could put more shadows within the thor figure rather than just blocking it out black. i like the pattern you use to communicate the chain mail texture and i think you could do more of this in your piece to make it more impressive
ReplyDeletemuscles could be accentuated. im not so sure what the white shape around the figures is, maybe you could define that a bit. i like the composition.
ReplyDeleteEpic. Separating Thor's body from the priest is a must, but the chain mail (scale mail?) is nicely done. I like the brick pattern, but the spacing between them may need to be reduced a bit. Love the idea, though.
ReplyDeleteI like all the content you've packed in here.
ReplyDeleteAsgard? Awesome.
Rainbow Bridge leading there? Double awesome.
The only real problem I have with it is that the top of the priest's head could be a bit more defined. Maybe a funny hat?
assuming i dont know the story, these characters or why this is unexpected, here are my suggestions---
ReplyDeletetry to look at this as objectively as possible-- look at it now, not as narrative, but as black and white Abstraction. How do these shapes fit together? do they fit?
theres a lot of info here, but the overall narrative seems to be taking place right down in the front center, so you want to shift our attention there, away from the setting youve created, and down to "what really matters".
the "Thor" character is one armed--- intentional? where is the missing arm? did he just lose it? I wouldnt have those questions if the figures were a little more isolated and didnt share so much of the same space/ overlap. Your classmates suggestions for separating them out a bit is a good one. I love the patterning though. I'd agree that Thor could use a little more of something to break him up a bit. *dana
The drawing is very good, but the narrative and sectioning of black and white shapes is slightly confusing. I have the same questions everyone else did about the story, and the arm - who's the fourth figure in the middle? Do you need the two figures on either side to get the point across? What IS the point?
ReplyDeleteI do disagree with the comments citing the wall blending into the sky as problematic, though. I like seeing the pattern of the wall end right up until the area of the sky. It simplifies the background in a good way, just make it more intentional.