I remember you sketch for this piece and I really loved it, I think the bold black and white shapes are nice, but I would like to see more detail as to what is actually going on since I don't get the sense that there are things flying out of his cereal anymore.
i agree, i really love the idea for this one, but i feel like a little too much information is lost in them to really get it. Maybe just a flittle more detail would lessen the confusion.
I really like the face of the boy in the top one. It looks like some kind of logo design. But I like the background in the bottom one since it has more details. And I agree with that you should make floating cereals clearer. I like the idea of this piece . I love your last assignment
Its really cute illustration :) I think you really studied positive and negative spaces well. I like the first one better. Its really clear and all the shapes make sense and legible. I like you using the light source to blacken the shapes but its little bit ambiguous than the first one.
Your piece from last week was really successful! However, I am having trouble reading the high contrast piece. I really loved the sketch you had for the little boy and you certainly stuck to the assignment but perhaps you could zoom in a bit and focus on the boy's face, the open box and the winged elephants? I would rework your original sketch, but keep characters and concept, if it is not working for the assignment.
Out of the two sketches, I think I like the first one better, but I think you should add more information to the background, perhaps. The piece from last week looks a ton better!
the original looks great! I'm glad you decided to go back over it with pen.
for the positive negative piece I prefer the second, with shapes from the light. I'm a little confused as to whats unexpected...is it a bug flying around? I think if you defined the left side of the boys face and body a little more it would be clearer.
Shapes made by lights, that's the one you should go with. The only thing you need to think about, especially on the face of the boy, is reflective light. A small amount of light would bounce off the table and would hit the left side of the kids face (the side in shadow). That small amount of detail I think will add clarity to the image. The flying elephants could be slightly larger so they were clearer.
everything is very blocky. i feel like you could put more white or black shapes to help describe what is going on and where the light is hitting your character and his surroundings. Im not really sure what is unexpected or even whats going on. I think some more detail would help your piece comunicate better
I think the lighting in the second one may be a bit overly-dramatic given the situation, but the first one works fairly nicely. Some clarity definitely needs to be added to keep the concept strong.
I really liked the sketch for this one. It had a whole lot of personality and energy.
Though the inks are excellent, and they add even more personality, the action itself is lost a little bit.
The style is great. The piece makes a lot of sense like this. If you can find a way to make the weird cereal action evident in this style, you're golden.
Holly-- first off- Im really liking where your ink wash (now with drawing on it) has gone. Please bring it to class next week so i can see it in person.
onto this assignment-- i think they are both (as others have said) suffering from being a little unclear. I think that you were probably playing it safe, maybe not sure how much line you could use (since i said "shape") but maybe now seeing other people's you'll get some ideas of how to proceed. I will say that i do like the 1st one better bc at the moment its easier to read, but i think moving forward, that you can use a little more line to separate his face from the background and to clarify the elephants a little more. You might also want to work a bit larger (even larger than 9x9 if you need to) so that you can work in more detail in the kitchen if you need to in order to get clarity.
I love how bold you got with the shapes, great kudos for really jumping in feet-first! The second layout gets my vote, I like the drama and I think the shadows give you more opportunity to play around. try some white shapes to outline more of his head, more of his facial features, too! A little white highlight on the "shadow" side of his nose and cheek, ect. Those elephants need to be SUPER clear - they look like bugs at this point. Make them very specific shapes, and the joke will read a lot better.
I remember you sketch for this piece and I really loved it, I think the bold black and white shapes are nice, but I would like to see more detail as to what is actually going on since I don't get the sense that there are things flying out of his cereal anymore.
ReplyDeleteGood work on the piece from last week as well!
i agree, i really love the idea for this one, but i feel like a little too much information is lost in them to really get it. Maybe just a flittle more detail would lessen the confusion.
ReplyDeleteThe piece you went over again is really sweet.
ReplyDeleteIt would benefit your positive/negative piece I think to also incorporate more elements that give a sense of motion.
Do you like grapefruits?
I really like the face of the boy in the top one. It looks like some kind of logo design. But I like the background in the bottom one since it has more details. And I agree with that you should make floating cereals clearer. I like the idea of this piece . I love your last assignment
ReplyDeleteIts really cute illustration :) I think you really studied positive and negative spaces well. I like the first one better. Its really clear and all the shapes make sense and legible. I like you using the light source to blacken the shapes but its little bit ambiguous than the first one.
ReplyDeleteYour piece from last week was really successful! However, I am having trouble reading the high contrast piece. I really loved the sketch you had for the little boy and you certainly stuck to the assignment but perhaps you could zoom in a bit and focus on the boy's face, the open box and the winged elephants? I would rework your original sketch, but keep characters and concept, if it is not working for the assignment.
ReplyDeleteOut of the two sketches, I think I like the first one better, but I think you should add more information to the background, perhaps. The piece from last week looks a ton better!
ReplyDeletethe original looks great! I'm glad you decided to go back over it with pen.
ReplyDeletefor the positive negative piece I prefer the second, with shapes from the light. I'm a little confused as to whats unexpected...is it a bug flying around? I think if you defined the left side of the boys face and body a little more it would be clearer.
I'm a little confused as to what is going on in it. I'd like that to be clearer. I also think that the second one with the light as shapes is better.
ReplyDeleteThe bridesmaid one looks fantastic. I like the second boy drawing (i think that's the light influenced one) better. it has a really good feel to it.
ReplyDeleteShapes made by lights, that's the one you should go with. The only thing you need to think about, especially on the face of the boy, is reflective light. A small amount of light would bounce off the table and would hit the left side of the kids face (the side in shadow). That small amount of detail I think will add clarity to the image. The flying elephants could be slightly larger so they were clearer.
ReplyDeleteI really like the second one more, the shapes are more dramatic, I agree that the little elephant could be a bit bigger.
ReplyDeletei like the expression in the second one better. but i think theyre both a bit lacking. im not so sure whats happening here either.
ReplyDeleteeverything is very blocky. i feel like you could put more white or black shapes to help describe what is going on and where the light is hitting your character and his surroundings. Im not really sure what is unexpected or even whats going on. I think some more detail would help your piece comunicate better
ReplyDeleteI think the lighting in the second one may be a bit overly-dramatic given the situation, but the first one works fairly nicely. Some clarity definitely needs to be added to keep the concept strong.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the sketch for this one. It had a whole lot of personality and energy.
ReplyDeleteThough the inks are excellent, and they add even more personality, the action itself is lost a little bit.
The style is great. The piece makes a lot of sense like this. If you can find a way to make the weird cereal action evident in this style, you're golden.
Holly-- first off- Im really liking where your ink wash (now with drawing on it) has gone. Please bring it to class next week so i can see it in person.
ReplyDeleteonto this assignment-- i think they are both (as others have said) suffering from being a little unclear. I think that you were probably playing it safe, maybe not sure how much line you could use (since i said "shape") but maybe now seeing other people's you'll get some ideas of how to proceed. I will say that i do like the 1st one better bc at the moment its easier to read, but i think moving forward, that you can use a little more line to separate his face from the background and to clarify the elephants a little more. You might also want to work a bit larger (even larger than 9x9 if you need to) so that you can work in more detail in the kitchen if you need to in order to get clarity.
some good feedback here. go for it! *dana
I love how bold you got with the shapes, great kudos for really jumping in feet-first! The second layout gets my vote, I like the drama and I think the shadows give you more opportunity to play around. try some white shapes to outline more of his head, more of his facial features, too! A little white highlight on the "shadow" side of his nose and cheek, ect. Those elephants need to be SUPER clear - they look like bugs at this point. Make them very specific shapes, and the joke will read a lot better.
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