Nice job working your sketch to fit the assignment; I think the high contrast improved it immensely. Perhaps the elevator dial thingy could be a bit bolder? It's a nice indicator of space and it gets a little lost next to all those lovely black shapes.
I like this alot. I think that maybe some bold around the elevator would be nice and on the floor sign, so the piece feels more full then just focusing on the center
i think it could really work if you made the elevator's floor marker all black and made the tick marks white ( i am referring the the half circle on above the elevator).
I think you really handled the assignment well. It almost gives a look of engraving. You really treated light sources well that the characters stand out although they have quite a lot of black shades.
You have an amazing amount of detail in this all defined using shapes! great characters, and it works well for the prompt. I'm not sure what I would change if anything, looks good to me. hot grandma
Wow both figures are very clear with only positive and negative space. I agree with darkening the outline of the elevator, but other than that everything works well
I second a lot of the "darken the elevator dial" comments. I think you did a wonderful job with the assignment. You might be able to get away with not closing all the shapes though, such as relying some on implied lines.
This is really good, I really like how you made the black shapes work to your advantage. The people are easy to read, and I think that you pulled off the point of the assignment very nicely.
Good use of black and whites in this. My one comment is that some parts of the woman's face look kind of gray, but I'm sure the final won't have any of that. Good job.
Nicole-- great! Very nice version of your original sketch. I agree that the floor indicator thingy should be a little bolder. Do that first, then look at it objectively and see if any of the other line weights need adjusting. Otherwise, really good solution! Dana
You really struck home with the darks in this piece. I think the amount of black really helps to add to the claustrophobic feel you were going for, and man does it make that smoke pop. There is a strong sense of personality to both of your characters. Again, darken the elevator clock and you should be good.
This is really well done and executed. I love the atmosphere you've created. I agree with doing something with the elevator dial to make it stand out a little more.
This is looking great, I think you really took full advantage of working this way. Everything is just as clear as it was in your original sketch, and more hilariously dramatic. Maybe do something interesting and decorative with the outside "border" (elevator door)?
By: Nicole Ackerman
I really like the way it looks in black and white. The highlights are perfect for defining the characters and the idea behind your piece
ReplyDeleteNice job working your sketch to fit the assignment; I think the high contrast improved it immensely. Perhaps the elevator dial thingy could be a bit bolder? It's a nice indicator of space and it gets a little lost next to all those lovely black shapes.
ReplyDeleteI like this alot. I think that maybe some bold around the elevator would be nice and on the floor sign, so the piece feels more full then just focusing on the center
ReplyDeletereally really reallly really strong~
ReplyDeletei think it could really work if you made the elevator's floor marker all black and made the tick marks white ( i am referring the the half circle on above the elevator).
Yea, that woman is really something else.
I think you really handled the assignment well. It almost gives a look of engraving. You really treated light sources well that the characters stand out although they have quite a lot of black shades.
ReplyDeleteYou have an amazing amount of detail in this all defined using shapes! great characters, and it works well for the prompt. I'm not sure what I would change if anything, looks good to me. hot grandma
ReplyDeleteI really like this the way it is, maybe try darkening more around the elevator. really good though!
ReplyDeleteWow both figures are very clear with only positive and negative space.
ReplyDeleteI agree with darkening the outline of the elevator, but other than that everything works well
I second a lot of the "darken the elevator dial" comments. I think you did a wonderful job with the assignment. You might be able to get away with not closing all the shapes though, such as relying some on implied lines.
ReplyDeleteThis is really good, I really like how you made the black shapes work to your advantage. The people are easy to read, and I think that you pulled off the point of the assignment very nicely.
ReplyDeleteNice job, I like how you emphasized the little woman's curves, perhaps a black boarder around the elevator to pull the eye around more?
ReplyDeletei think this is really successful. Good use of lights and darks. Its very believable. i enjoy the composition of the piece and i love the old woman.
ReplyDeleteGood use of black and whites in this. My one comment is that some parts of the woman's face look kind of gray, but I'm sure the final won't have any of that. Good job.
ReplyDeleteNicole-- great! Very nice version of your original sketch. I agree that the floor indicator thingy should be a little bolder. Do that first, then look at it objectively and see if any of the other line weights need adjusting. Otherwise, really good solution! Dana
ReplyDeleteYou really struck home with the darks in this piece. I think the amount of black really helps to add to the claustrophobic feel you were going for, and man does it make that smoke pop. There is a strong sense of personality to both of your characters. Again, darken the elevator clock and you should be good.
ReplyDeleteIt's pretty ballin. Adding all the darks really gave it a lot of depth, and it feels more like an elevator.
ReplyDeleteI'm not entirely sure if you need all the shadows, though.
This is really well done and executed. I love the atmosphere you've created. I agree with doing something with the elevator dial to make it stand out a little more.
ReplyDeleteThis is looking great, I think you really took full advantage of working this way. Everything is just as clear as it was in your original sketch, and more hilariously dramatic. Maybe do something interesting and decorative with the outside "border" (elevator door)?
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