I love it. It's incredibly sad. What medium are you planning on doing the final in?
The only thing I would say is that it took me a second for the coffin to read as one (though probably because the pics are in a funky order) and aren't they all supposed to be the same size?
But really, nice set of images, they're very successful narratives on their own and as a whole.
i think the background line that loops throughout the background of all the pieces works really well and is very dynamic. also, your story is simple, and layed out well composition-wise. When you present the final piece make sure there really isnt any space between the panels so that the spaces dont become too distracting and interupt the flow of the overall piece, especially with the concept youve got going on
This reads really easily and is well drawn. Im curious to see what your color choice is going to be. The only problem i see is that the middle image is a different size.
This is very well drawn, you definitely have your own very distinct style and you stick to it well, the narrative reads seamlessly, line that continues through the 3 pieces add to the cohesiveness.
compositionally the first two pieces are great, but the third with the tombstone is awkward, everything is smashed into the middle ground like an old Cezanne painting. the space sort of moves upwards, instead of backwards. It's probably because you felt the need to connect the hill from panel 2 to panel 3.
I would try to rework the last piece, but your use of color could be enough to make the image sit correctly in space.
I really love this. From what I've seen so far, this is the piece that is most emotionally connected with its viewer. I understand the narrative perfectly and the time period is portrayed well. I feel for the characters, and I can imaging this being a storyboard for a movie. Nicely done.
beautiful drawing! the elements that you've used to tie the three together across the compositions (the big sweeping line, the florals, etc) were great ideas. my only problem really is that the directions were to have three images that were the same size, but i think you'll be forgiven.
great narrative the dudes left arm in the first panel could use a little more weight on her body. it doesnt look like hes touching her without a shadow or fold in the fabric or anything. the little boy in the last panel has a slightly different perspective than the woman. It looks like were looking down on her but hes more straight up and down
I'm getting goose bumps here. Its a really classic story and you've done it a great deal of justice. I only have a few small nit picky criticisms.
First and foremost, although you have a very interesting use of space with the three different sized picture planes, as you most likely already realized, it goes against the assigned criteria. Although it works so well maybe you can bend that a bit.
Second and last, the wives expression in the last panel looks a bit pissy as opposed to upset. Again, maybe that's the look your going for but I'd look into it. Other than that in stunned.
I think this flows really nicely, the background line makes sense and isn't distracting. You were able to have two events in one frame without it seeming awkward or confusing. The expressions are great, all except the woman in the last frame, she seems angry. They work great individually and together. Application of color will be an interesting addition.
this is great. your characters are very well drawn. the pieces flow well together, but they should be the same size. your compositions of all three panels are niiice. i dont think anything else really needs to be done to this piece.
i like how the figures in the background fade and have lesser detail it gives depth. i think the first and the last panels have the same widt, i would make sure that they did if they are not. Once again i like the way you rendered he figure, they are very romantic and carry out through each panel. i also like how the hill/ composition carries through each image nice touch. i think you should change that tree branch in the last image to a cloud or something that way the you still have it balancing the comp but since the hills run through the hole thing we dont ask were is the rest of the tree.
I expect that you look at a lot of Andrew Hem's work? If not you really need to do that. I think looking at him would probably help with ideas on how to color this piece.
I really enjoy this work. It has a lot of really cool compositional elements, such as the decorative line that goes through the three panels and circles back around as the horizon line. The figures' anatomy is really interesting as well. The only thing that really really really bugs me, is his gigantic hands in the first panel.
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I love it. It's incredibly sad. What medium are you planning on doing the final in?
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I would say is that it took me a second for the coffin to read as one (though probably because the pics are in a funky order) and aren't they all supposed to be the same size?
But really, nice set of images, they're very successful narratives on their own and as a whole.
Its really interesting that the images are different sizes yet they still read together very well.
ReplyDeletei think the background line that loops throughout the background of all the pieces works really well and is very dynamic. also, your story is simple, and layed out well composition-wise. When you present the final piece make sure there really isnt any space between the panels so that the spaces dont become too distracting and interupt the flow of the overall piece, especially with the concept youve got going on
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ReplyDeleteThis reads really easily and is well drawn. Im curious to see what your color choice is going to be. The only problem i see is that the middle image is a different size.
ReplyDeleteI like the flow of the piece. At first I thought the coffin was just a picture frame
ReplyDeleteThis is very well drawn, you definitely have your own very distinct style and you stick to it well, the narrative reads seamlessly, line that continues through the 3 pieces add to the cohesiveness.
ReplyDeletecompositionally the first two pieces are great, but the third with the tombstone is awkward, everything is smashed into the middle ground like an old Cezanne painting. the space sort of moves upwards, instead of backwards. It's probably because you felt the need to connect the hill from panel 2 to panel 3.
I would try to rework the last piece, but your use of color could be enough to make the image sit correctly in space.
I really love this. From what I've seen so far, this is the piece that is most emotionally connected with its viewer. I understand the narrative perfectly and the time period is portrayed well. I feel for the characters, and I can imaging this being a storyboard for a movie. Nicely done.
ReplyDeletebeautiful drawing! the elements that you've used to tie the three together across the compositions (the big sweeping line, the florals, etc) were great ideas. my only problem really is that the directions were to have three images that were the same size, but i think you'll be forgiven.
ReplyDeletegreat narrative the dudes left arm in the first panel could use a little more weight on her body. it doesnt look like hes touching her without a shadow or fold in the fabric or anything. the little boy in the last panel has a slightly different perspective than the woman. It looks like were looking down on her but hes more straight up and down
ReplyDeleteI'm getting goose bumps here. Its a really classic story and you've done it a great deal of justice. I only have a few small nit picky criticisms.
ReplyDeleteFirst and foremost, although you have a very interesting use of space with the three different sized picture planes, as you most likely already realized, it goes against the assigned criteria. Although it works so well maybe you can bend that a bit.
Second and last, the wives expression in the last panel looks a bit pissy as opposed to upset. Again, maybe that's the look your going for but I'd look into it. Other than that in stunned.
I think this flows really nicely, the background line makes sense and isn't distracting. You were able to have two events in one frame without it seeming awkward or confusing. The expressions are great, all except the woman in the last frame, she seems angry. They work great individually and together. Application of color will be an interesting addition.
ReplyDeletethis is great. your characters are very well drawn. the pieces flow well together, but they should be the same size. your compositions of all three panels are niiice. i dont think anything else really needs to be done to this piece.
ReplyDeletei like how the figures in the background fade and have lesser detail it gives depth. i think the first and the last panels have the same widt, i would make sure that they did if they are not. Once again i like the way you rendered he figure, they are very romantic and carry out through each panel. i also like how the hill/ composition carries through each image nice touch. i think you should change that tree branch in the last image to a cloud or something that way the you still have it balancing the comp but since the hills run through the hole thing we dont ask were is the rest of the tree.
ReplyDeletevery well drawn. love the way the panels connect.
ReplyDeletePROBLEM: they are not all the same size. UH OH.
have you seen "a very long engagement"? this reminds me of that movie a little.
sorry, I'm getting fatigued and my comments are losing quality.
color it awesome and it will be SO GOOD.
I expect that you look at a lot of Andrew Hem's work? If not you really need to do that. I think looking at him would probably help with ideas on how to color this piece.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy this work. It has a lot of really cool compositional elements, such as the decorative line that goes through the three panels and circles back around as the horizon line. The figures' anatomy is really interesting as well. The only thing that really really really bugs me, is his gigantic hands in the first panel.