a collection of work by 1st and 2nd semester sophomores
Tuesday, October 13, 2009
Matthew Carignan trip
Theres a tree that grows fruit. Theres a colony of little green men that take the fruit and use it to make houses. Sorry all my photos are backwards. i had to upload them through photobooth. And im in the process of shading the last slide.
i think the concept behind this one has a lot of potential and I think color will make a big difference. The fruit and the people work really well together in creating another world. I think you could really have a lot of fun with those clouds and the house panel. The idea is really strong so I feel that if you pushed it a little further it could be really great.
I like the story behind it. The first and last panel are good. I really think you can go further with the second panel though. Rendering aside, I think its the least interesting of the panels. I guess maybe play with different perspectives to dramatize or show how small these green men are?
The tree character is definitely fleshed out well. I agree the the middle panel could use more,maybe having the tree somewhere far in the background to show how long these guys have been dragging this house plant. Also, in the third panel, develop more the area that their house stands on. Maybe have some other house plants in the background, like its a futurtistic gated community or something,
cool piece. I love the idea and it is coming along very well. I think you should add more to the last panel. Maybe add some distant fruit houses so the planet doesn't look barren. Right now it looks like only two little green men live there.
I love your characters and the way you draw your objects so organically.
That being said, I think you could have rendered the other objects besides the fruit a bit more. The story is great and imaginative and is reads well, so kudos to you for that.
Im very interested to see this one in color, the story is so interesting to me, and the narrative is very apparent in your drawing. Its so simple, i love it.
Maybe you could add a smaller fruit on the tree to show that they grow more i dunno. i think you just need to finish up the sketches and make some good color choices then you got yourself a good piece.
i really like your story, its very unique. i definitly think that this piece is color will be significantly stronger, and im excited to see it finished. i think some other houses in the background of the third panel would be cool.
Very original concept. It reminds me of the Smurfs. I now know you have this kind of minimalist value preference so Im not going to hark about that.
Over all I think you have it nailed down.
On the first panel I would draw a few more of these fruits and maybe have the tree actually setting the fruit on the ground to help clarify the narrative. I'm not sure if you have thought about childrens book illustration but you pieces are always kind of in that vein, i would look into it.
I like the story, it's simple and effective, it definitely works. i think color will really help this though i would definitely consider your palette a lot before. Green is a powerful and sometimes annoying color to work with, it can easily be too earthy or too brash, so watch out for that.
Also I feel like the compositions are very centralized minus the middle one. It's definitely technically well done. xD
The characters are interesting and I think the color play will be an important element to this. The middle panel is a little confusing, I wasn't sure what they were doing for a little bit. For me that last one is the least interesting, possibly because you already have a composition with a centered object, but in this one there is little action. It's placed in almost the identical spot on the page. What will be going on in the background of the last image? Maybe that is where something will help lead the eye around the page.
i really like your little characters and how you drew the first tree with almost elephant like legs. i think you should zoom in on the last one and maybe see the people in the holes living in the fruit. also even if there not as large i think you should continue the clouds in 1 and 3 of your pieces
This triptych is going to be affected by its use of color a lot i feel. The compositions in all of the drawings seem nice and the narrative is simple and easy to read. I feel like the big negative aspect i see right now is that there are a lot of large spaces of only white. But because i feel like this drawing will be so affected by color, I don't know if you should care about those empty spaces much right now, just worry about activating them with your palette.
i think the concept behind this one has a lot of potential and I think color will make a big difference. The fruit and the people work really well together in creating another world. I think you could really have a lot of fun with those clouds and the house panel. The idea is really strong so I feel that if you pushed it a little further it could be really great.
ReplyDeleteI like the story behind it. The first and last panel are good. I really think you can go further with the second panel though. Rendering aside, I think its the least interesting of the panels. I guess maybe play with different perspectives to dramatize or show how small these green men are?
ReplyDeleteThe tree character is definitely fleshed out well. I agree the the middle panel could use more,maybe having the tree somewhere far in the background to show how long these guys have been dragging this house plant. Also, in the third panel, develop more the area that their house stands on. Maybe have some other house plants in the background, like its a futurtistic gated community or something,
ReplyDeleteThis has a great style and it reads well. I don't have any ideas for how to improve it other then that i highly suggest you do the final in color.
ReplyDeletecool piece. I love the idea and it is coming along very well. I think you should add more to the last panel. Maybe add some distant fruit houses so the planet doesn't look barren. Right now it looks like only two little green men live there.
ReplyDeleteI love your characters and the way you draw your objects so organically.
ReplyDeleteThat being said, I think you could have rendered the other objects besides the fruit a bit more. The story is great and imaginative and is reads well, so kudos to you for that.
Im very interested to see this one in color, the story is so interesting to me, and the narrative is very apparent in your drawing. Its so simple, i love it.
ReplyDeleteMaybe you could add a smaller fruit on the tree to show that they grow more i dunno.
i think you just need to finish up the sketches and make some good color choices then you got yourself a good piece.
nice character design and style! hopefully you can have some fun with color, and it would be nice to see some texture on the ground.
ReplyDeletei really like your story, its very unique. i definitly think that this piece is color will be significantly stronger, and im excited to see it finished. i think some other houses in the background of the third panel would be cool.
ReplyDeleteVery original concept. It reminds me of the Smurfs. I now know you have this kind of minimalist value preference so Im not going to hark about that.
ReplyDeleteOver all I think you have it nailed down.
On the first panel I would draw a few more of these fruits and maybe have the tree actually setting the fruit on the ground to help clarify the narrative. I'm not sure if you have thought about childrens book illustration but you pieces are always kind of in that vein, i would look into it.
I like the story, it's simple and effective, it definitely works. i think color will really help this though i would definitely consider your palette a lot before. Green is a powerful and sometimes annoying color to work with, it can easily be too earthy or too brash, so watch out for that.
ReplyDeleteAlso I feel like the compositions are very centralized minus the middle one. It's definitely technically well done. xD
The characters are interesting and I think the color play will be an important element to this. The middle panel is a little confusing, I wasn't sure what they were doing for a little bit. For me that last one is the least interesting, possibly because you already have a composition with a centered object, but in this one there is little action. It's placed in almost the identical spot on the page. What will be going on in the background of the last image? Maybe that is where something will help lead the eye around the page.
ReplyDeletei really like your little characters and how you drew the first tree with almost elephant like legs. i think you should zoom in on the last one and maybe see the people in the holes living in the fruit. also even if there not as large i think you should continue the clouds in 1 and 3 of your pieces
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ReplyDeleteok, cool.
everything is so confusing.
at least I know this one is supposed to be surreal.
make the fruit pink.
This triptych is going to be affected by its use of color a lot i feel. The compositions in all of the drawings seem nice and the narrative is simple and easy to read. I feel like the big negative aspect i see right now is that there are a lot of large spaces of only white. But because i feel like this drawing will be so affected by color, I don't know if you should care about those empty spaces much right now, just worry about activating them with your palette.
ReplyDelete