I cant click on the images to enlarge them for some reason so i cant really tell much right now, but your drawings seem to stay consistent, and your drawing style is visible through these thumbnails. And your landscapes look well done and atmospheric. A lot of times people forget about the backgrounds in there pieces but yours seems to be put together well.
Not really the most constructive criticisms but thats all i can really tell you because of how small you uploaded the images.
Your narrative is clear and they function on they're own well and your style and markmaking is consistent throughout. Its kind of interesting how each piece looks like a screencap from a camera panning up and over whats going on
definitely a bummer that these won't go any bigger! i hope you try to fix it before digital class is over, because you might miss out on some good feedback. but as far as i can tell, the shading looks great. it seems like you have a great mixture of lights and darks, and i can tell the drawings will work very well next to one another.
I really love the proportions of the three pieces, it's interesting and different. I wish that I could see them better, but I'm guessing there was some sort of malfunction when you posted this.
From what I can see, the backgrounds look very developed and I can tell what the narrative is. I think the figures in the ditch on the last drawing look a bit flat, but other than that it all looks great!
Nice composition on all the panels. That grassy knoll in the first panel looks like it has a face, which I think is cool because it looks like it's in agony and then it explodes.
Definitely like the way you have considered the value for the these, especially the first one. It's difficult to see because of the inability to enlarge, are the figures as considered as the environment? I think they will flow together nicely. It'll be interesting to see the effect of the color and tone you choose.
it's a great story that lends itself well to this condensed format. I think you could be more specific with those trees in the background. I like the really wide format. history rules.
i duno if i can help you with that one lol sorry, i do like the transition in the background, almost makes me feel like the sun is rising through the piece. i enjoy the compositiongs as well, i dont think it needs a lense change as far as zooming in and out. im a little confused about that bomb in the first piece though maybe its historically accurate but im not historically bright
i think you tryptich overall is great and reads very well. this is gonna sound picky, but i think more of the sky needs to be revealed in the background of the third panel. It will feel unbalanced if there is a lot of green from the grassey hills and some dark sky eeks in. your images are cropped very well. its good that you have a standing confederate flaf in the last panel, it communicates well the idea that they won the battle. what is that thing on the hill in the first panel btw?
You really nailed the story here. I think that first image really grabs me. You can tell there's some impending doom about to happen. The sky is just right in that image. The simplicity of the characters is just right... anymore rendering would be unnecessary.
If I would change anything, perhaps maybe give more dimensionality to the dead soldiers. They look a bit on the flat side, at least on these images... they may look better in larger scale.
Good job though.. like your last piece, I also think your graphite pieces are visually as strong as the colored.
I definitely agree, it's a shame that I can't see these bigger. From what I can tell it is simple and effective. Out of curiosity, is the difference in the value of the skies showing a time change or is that just the product of scanning? I wish I could give you better feedback but I feel like it's hard to really delve into them without seeing them closer.
This triptych does a great job of fully communicating the narrative and i personally think it's a really fun one (if they are playing dead like i think they are).
The problem however lays in the craftsmanship of some of the drawing. The first problem is that right off the bat there is an unidentifiable object in the center of the first panel. I don't want to complain about the unclickable link, because sometimes blogger just sucks like that, but i do request that you clear up the rendering of that object a little.
The other thing that i don't enjoy is the trees. The figures are well rendered, and so is the rest of this landscape, but the trees are just a little too cartoony.
I can't wait to see this in color, the compositions seemed to have set you up for a lot of good color combinations.
From what I can see the characters look pretty good. The stylization works throughout the whole piece. I would say just work on the hole more in the last one, the second one looks good but the last one could use more shading.
I cant click on the images to enlarge them for some reason so i cant really tell much right now, but your drawings seem to stay consistent, and your drawing style is visible through these thumbnails. And your landscapes look well done and atmospheric. A lot of times people forget about the backgrounds in there pieces but yours seems to be put together well.
ReplyDeleteNot really the most constructive criticisms but thats all i can really tell you because of how small you uploaded the images.
Your narrative is clear and they function on they're own well and your style and markmaking is consistent throughout. Its kind of interesting how each piece looks like a screencap from a camera panning up and over whats going on
ReplyDeletedefinitely a bummer that these won't go any bigger! i hope you try to fix it before digital class is over, because you might miss out on some good feedback. but as far as i can tell, the shading looks great. it seems like you have a great mixture of lights and darks, and i can tell the drawings will work very well next to one another.
ReplyDeleteI really love the proportions of the three pieces, it's interesting and different. I wish that I could see them better, but I'm guessing there was some sort of malfunction when you posted this.
ReplyDeleteFrom what I can see, the backgrounds look very developed and I can tell what the narrative is. I think the figures in the ditch on the last drawing look a bit flat, but other than that it all looks great!
Nice composition on all the panels. That grassy knoll in the first panel looks like it has a face, which I think is cool because it looks like it's in agony and then it explodes.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely like the way you have considered the value for the these, especially the first one. It's difficult to see because of the inability to enlarge, are the figures as considered as the environment? I think they will flow together nicely. It'll be interesting to see the effect of the color and tone you choose.
ReplyDeleteMy bad you guys on the "not able to enlarge." I also don't know how to fix it so... um... maybe steve can help me.
ReplyDeleteit's a great story that lends itself well to this condensed format.
ReplyDeleteI think you could be more specific with those trees in the background.
I like the really wide format.
history rules.
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ReplyDeletei duno if i can help you with that one lol sorry, i do like the transition in the background, almost makes me feel like the sun is rising through the piece. i enjoy the compositiongs as well, i dont think it needs a lense change as far as zooming in and out. im a little confused about that bomb in the first piece though maybe its historically accurate but im not historically bright
ReplyDeletei think you tryptich overall is great and reads very well. this is gonna sound picky, but i think more of the sky needs to be revealed in the background of the third panel. It will feel unbalanced if there is a lot of green from the grassey hills and some dark sky eeks in. your images are cropped very well. its good that you have a standing confederate flaf in the last panel, it communicates well the idea that they won the battle. what is that thing on the hill in the first panel btw?
ReplyDeleteYou really nailed the story here. I think that first image really grabs me. You can tell there's some impending doom about to happen. The sky is just right in that image. The simplicity of the characters is just right... anymore rendering would be unnecessary.
ReplyDeleteIf I would change anything, perhaps maybe give more dimensionality to the dead soldiers. They look a bit on the flat side, at least on these images... they may look better in larger scale.
Good job though.. like your last piece, I also think your graphite pieces are visually as strong as the colored.
I definitely agree, it's a shame that I can't see these bigger. From what I can tell it is simple and effective. Out of curiosity, is the difference in the value of the skies showing a time change or is that just the product of scanning? I wish I could give you better feedback but I feel like it's hard to really delve into them without seeing them closer.
ReplyDeleteThis triptych does a great job of fully communicating the narrative and i personally think it's a really fun one (if they are playing dead like i think they are).
ReplyDeleteThe problem however lays in the craftsmanship of some of the drawing. The first problem is that right off the bat there is an unidentifiable object in the center of the first panel. I don't want to complain about the unclickable link, because sometimes blogger just sucks like that, but i do request that you clear up the rendering of that object a little.
The other thing that i don't enjoy is the trees. The figures are well rendered, and so is the rest of this landscape, but the trees are just a little too cartoony.
I can't wait to see this in color, the compositions seemed to have set you up for a lot of good color combinations.
From what I can see the characters look pretty good. The stylization works throughout the whole piece. I would say just work on the hole more in the last one, the second one looks good but the last one could use more shading.
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