beginning: mouse smells cheesemiddle: mouse gets closer and contemplates eating cheese
end( which is unfinished): mouse goes for the cheese and..snap.
im having some trouble with the last pictures, but th
is is what i have so far.
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The perspective is great, really lets your eye flow through the entire piece. I think you could do a little more shading on the wall, especially at the corner where the two walls meet, that way they appear a little more separate. Overall really nice though, the shadows in the cheese holes look great and give it a lot of dimension.
ReplyDeletei could see that the last one was unfinished but i thought the general idea was he gets away with it. I think this could have great comedic effect if the last panel just had an empty mouse trap that is snapped and some cheese crumbs leading away or a IOU on the mouse trap. but if thats not the tone or message you're going for ignore that of course.I do like the how you've placed the hole in the wall, i think it adds to the narrative w/o being excess info or cluttering the piece. all the objects are drawn very well, the cheese, mouse and the trap. cant wait to see this in color
ReplyDeletegreat rendering on the first two images. it really has an illustrative child book feel to it. but yea, really figure out how you want to go with that last panel. do you want to go the gruesome route or something more playful? in any case, reupload that last image when you finish cause i think it's off to a good start.
ReplyDeletei like how the perspective doesnt change throughout all 3 images. It lets everything flow very nicely. Definitly repost the last image when its finished, id like to see it.
ReplyDeleteThis is great but i feel bad for the mouse...
ReplyDeletei like how you decided not to changer perspective. This would work both in black and white and in color. Which are you planning to go for?
This is so adorable (besides the whole death thing), I love the mouse. I think that once you get the last panel finished it'll be very readable as a story. You did a really good job with the shadow that the mouse casts in the middle piece.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful drawings. I like the perspective. I don't think the last panel should get too macabre. It wouldn't fit in with rest of the panels which have an endearing quality to me.
ReplyDeletevery precise drawing! great perspective, and the mouse has a lot of character. makes you feel for the little guy. i would definitely put a lot of work into that mouse character when it comes to the final, because though you chose a strong scene to repeat, the viewer is going to need some interesting changes from panel to panel to stay interested.
ReplyDeleteGreat drawing I appreciate the care you took to get that perspective exactly right, and the way you rendered the mouse as well.
ReplyDeleteThe final drawing is what is really going to make the lasting image in this image, so i would really try to figure it out.
I don't think any of us want to see such a cute innocent creature smashed to pieces but ultimately its your decision. I really want to see how this one turns out.
Really like the work so far, i wish it was finished though...
ReplyDeleteHow are you planning to approach color? Will it be a vibrant palette or more muted, i feel either could work though it could be interesting if it sort of changed from muted to vivid throughout the works.
The mouse is cute but it doesn't have anything striking about it. Perhaps try playing with the expressions and 'mannerisms' of it? I understand you're going for a more naturalistic approach but I think giving it a little more character could really add to the illustration.
From the first few images i was really rooting for the little guy (he's adorable) but I guess your going to X him.
ReplyDeleteWether its intuitive or you have really worked for it, your sense of light and shadow always comes through very clearly, adding a nice degree of believability.
Frames one and two are great, wouldn't do a thing, as far as the last??? You have to just do it. Unfortunate as it is, I'm sure you could find some great photo reference on google for the dead mouse scene.
I love the perspective and how you've really considered where the value will go. I'd be interested to see how you handle the death scene since it is so adorable outside of it. The scene is the same outside of the mouse, so the mouse and how he affects his environment (as far as lighting etc) will be important. The images seem to flow nicely.
ReplyDeletei really hope to see his eyes like bulgin out from the snap of the trap. i think so far the lighting and the illustration of the mouse are good. i hope you dress up those floor and wall with some color though. good luck on that last one keep us posted
ReplyDeletenice perspective. nice drawing all around really.
ReplyDeleteI think the simplest stories like this transfer the best to this format.
I'm kind of glad you didn't finish the last one. I don't want to see that little guy killed.
I enjoy your dedication to the rendering in these drawings; your really creating space with these well. The skill that you have shown in crafting the mouse and manipulating his emotions is really great and helps with the communication of the simple narrative. You really did not need the dialogue in the blog, your drawings are very readable.
ReplyDeleteI think the only criticism i can give you is that i don't see you taking any chances with these drawings. They are very up front depictions of a very simplistic story. There is no problem if you are okay with that, but i think you have made your skill evident and that moving forward you may want to try and challenge yourself a little more.