This is nice An ice cream sharing date! However why is his spoon gold? It almost makes it look like something other than a spoon? I like your color pallet within the piece. It looks like the girl is bored since her head is leaning on her hand. I would almost like to see this piece zoomed out a little to see more of the body language of the couple.
I really like your warm color scheme and you did a great job with the hands. I will say that the inclusion of the woman's lips in the top left corner are a bit awkward and the piece could probably be fine without them, especially since you see no more of the man.
My keeps getting drawn to the pink in the background. I think that it is just really bright, and it can be hard to look at next to the skin tone sometimes. I also think that the stem of the ice cream bowl/cup thing gets cut off awkwardly. But, cute idea!
I love the warm color you use fore the color and this idea of ice cream sharing! it is very sweet and I hope you could put more contrast between ice cream and the spoons, since the spoons are blending with the ice cream. it is really lovely illustrated moment though! :)
I love the idea of sharing ice cream with lover. Although ice cream is cold, I feel warmness from this piece. I wish to see man’s face, just little like how you did it with female. I think it will help pushing identity of character and emotions.
I like the warm and cozy color scheme this piece gives off.
The inclusion of the woman's lower facial features kind of throws the composition off a bit and I feel as though it would be better off it either it wasn't there at all, or the other person's features were included as well.
I really like the concept and the positioning of the women on the left is really helps to express an idea of who this couple is, my one suggesting would be to add some hard edges and a few stronger value changes.
I like the soft colors! but I want you use different colors to give your work more sense of distance. the face of girl and her hand looked stick together. You can make girl's face little bit darker to push it into the background. the Ice cream is same issue. front one must be most poped out an the backward one mush be low saterated color, duller.
I see what you were trying to do by including that little bit of the girls face, but I agree with a previous comment about how she looks a little bit bored. If you want that corner of her face in the piece, I'd just zoom out a little bit more so that you can give yourself room to make her smiling to show the viewer that she isn't bored and is enjoying a nice date.
I'd also enjoy some more contrast within the ice cream as well, to make it seem a little less like liquid, and a little more solid.
Overall, I like this piece. The coloring is really nice and warm, and the concept is pretty adorable.
A very cute piece but i have difficulty reading the narrative and the forms become lost a little. I read the focus but i believe it is to zoomed in that I have difficulty reading the main story. but the use of colors are fantastic and the food look delicious, i just wish perhaps the figures would have a clear edge.
This is a good idea, showing a close up of two people sharing ice cream. I wish there were more shadows for every object to make it look three dimensional. The use of colors are nicely done. I think more details are needed as well. I wish you could give a little more information about the people. The person on the left is smiling but what is the right person? The person could be making a disgusted face at the person on the left. There are many possibilities of outcomes.
A cute idea! The piece has a very soft feel to it. I wish it had some lines to help pull out the main parts, and also if you brought the girls face out into frame a little bit more, we would be able to see the entire expression instead of just the bored look that everyone else has noticed. I think the colors are nice, but the pink may be a little too vibrant for it.
I really love the concept. I think the coloring is great but the perspective is a bit wonky. The piece seems like it could benefit from some subtle linework. as well you could probably make expand the composition to fit the two characters .
This is sweet (hehe). I like the creamy feel of the color and how soft you made the atmosphere. What I like to see is more contrast, like, darker lips and shinier spoon (it kind of blend in with the ice cream). The colors just need a little boost and push. Overall, great concept and idea, it's cute. :)
I like the idea of focusing on not the face but the hands. It's a unique take on the assignment. I don't think the female figure looks bored. Her little smirk in the corner looks more flirtatious than bored. I think the cropping of the piece is what confuses people. The colors tones in the piece look too similar. Maybe instead of coloring everything, you could've focused on only some parts, like fingers or the spoons.
What's better than sharing dessert on Valentine's day? I think your concept plays off something cute that alot of couples do, but doesn't seem to be on cards much. I found myself concerned that the ice cream was melting, though. Adding some appropriate texture for ice cream or clarifying that it's frozen yogurt would be nice. Also, many of the colors are of the same value key. Squint, and there isn't quite enough contrast.
I like the attention to the desert- it looks very appetizing- I want to see more vibrant colors/ contrast and more of the picture- i feel like I'm missing part of the story. Still good work!
This is an incredibly lifelike yet tender moment, and you captured it like a snapshot. The tiny illustration is cropped really well, and it feels like the two lovebirds are carrying on a conversation when you're not looking at them. I like that you didn't shy away from warm browns and pinks, because sometimes when it comes to illustrating desserts people go jewel-toned very fast.
adding to everyone else's thoughts-- id just get rid of the woman's face entirely. Its such a sweet (no pun intended) idea and the sharing of food is already intimate-- you don't put a spoon into a dish with someone else's spoon if you don't like them, so her expression (which I think is meant to seem dreamy) isn't needed. I love the warmth of the piece. Maybe just a few shifts in color would help so its not all so fleshy colored? If you were doing it over again, i think it could be cropped a little more interestingly (the bottom of the glass being cut off, but still reading at flat-- instead of seeing the rounded ellipse that the base would have on the table) is confusing my eye, for example.
But I really like it and it would be a very nice card.
I definitely do agree with what was said above. This is so sweet, and the colors that you used help play it up so well! Having the hands in there only can really mess around with such a simple composition and piece. Which I think would fit perfectly with this! I do agree with the bowl being flattened out a little bit. So maybe simply making it a shorter stem on the bowl, and bringing the ellipse up higher will help it stand on its own. Otherwise so very warming! Which they'll need because ice cream is so cold!
This is nice An ice cream sharing date! However why is his spoon gold? It almost makes it look like something other than a spoon? I like your color pallet within the piece. It looks like the girl is bored since her head is leaning on her hand. I would almost like to see this piece zoomed out a little to see more of the body language of the couple.
ReplyDeleteI really like your warm color scheme and you did a great job with the hands. I will say that the inclusion of the woman's lips in the top left corner are a bit awkward and the piece could probably be fine without them, especially since you see no more of the man.
ReplyDeleteMy keeps getting drawn to the pink in the background. I think that it is just really bright, and it can be hard to look at next to the skin tone sometimes. I also think that the stem of the ice cream bowl/cup thing gets cut off awkwardly. But, cute idea!
ReplyDeleteThis is a nice warm piece. I get a very lovey vibe from it. I think something that might help the lips is just zooming out a little more.
ReplyDeleteI love the warm color you use fore the color and this idea of ice cream sharing! it is very sweet and I hope you could put more contrast between ice cream and the spoons, since the spoons are blending with the ice cream. it is really lovely illustrated moment though! :)
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of sharing ice cream with lover. Although ice cream is cold, I feel warmness from this piece. I wish to see man’s face, just little like how you did it with female. I think it will help pushing identity of character and emotions.
ReplyDeleteI like the warm and cozy color scheme this piece gives off.
ReplyDeleteThe inclusion of the woman's lower facial features kind of throws the composition off a bit and I feel as though it would be better off it either it wasn't there at all, or the other person's features were included as well.
I really like the concept and the positioning of the women on the left is really helps to express an idea of who this couple is, my one suggesting would be to add some hard edges and a few stronger value changes.
ReplyDeleteI like the soft colors! but I want you use different colors to give your work more sense of distance. the face of girl and her hand looked stick together. You can make girl's face little bit darker to push it into the background. the Ice cream is same issue. front one must be most poped out an the backward one mush be low saterated color, duller.
ReplyDeleteI see what you were trying to do by including that little bit of the girls face, but I agree with a previous comment about how she looks a little bit bored. If you want that corner of her face in the piece, I'd just zoom out a little bit more so that you can give yourself room to make her smiling to show the viewer that she isn't bored and is enjoying a nice date.
ReplyDeleteI'd also enjoy some more contrast within the ice cream as well, to make it seem a little less like liquid, and a little more solid.
Overall, I like this piece. The coloring is really nice and warm, and the concept is pretty adorable.
A very cute piece but i have difficulty reading the narrative and the forms become lost a little. I read the focus but i believe it is to zoomed in that I have difficulty reading the main story. but the use of colors are fantastic and the food look delicious, i just wish perhaps the figures would have a clear edge.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good idea, showing a close up of two people sharing ice cream. I wish there were more shadows for every object to make it look three dimensional. The use of colors are nicely done. I think more details are needed as well. I wish you could give a little more information about the people. The person on the left is smiling but what is the right person? The person could be making a disgusted face at the person on the left. There are many possibilities of outcomes.
ReplyDeleteA cute idea! The piece has a very soft feel to it. I wish it had some lines to help pull out the main parts, and also if you brought the girls face out into frame a little bit more, we would be able to see the entire expression instead of just the bored look that everyone else has noticed. I think the colors are nice, but the pink may be a little too vibrant for it.
ReplyDeleteI really love the concept. I think the coloring is great but the perspective is a bit wonky. The piece seems like it could benefit from some subtle linework. as well you could probably make expand the composition to fit the two characters .
ReplyDeleteThis is sweet (hehe). I like the creamy feel of the color and how soft you made the atmosphere. What I like to see is more contrast, like, darker lips and shinier spoon (it kind of blend in with the ice cream). The colors just need a little boost and push.
ReplyDeleteOverall, great concept and idea, it's cute. :)
I like the idea of focusing on not the face but the hands. It's a unique take on the assignment. I don't think the female figure looks bored. Her little smirk in the corner looks more flirtatious than bored. I think the cropping of the piece is what confuses people.
ReplyDeleteThe colors tones in the piece look too similar. Maybe instead of coloring everything, you could've focused on only some parts, like fingers or the spoons.
What's better than sharing dessert on Valentine's day? I think your concept plays off something cute that alot of couples do, but doesn't seem to be on cards much. I found myself concerned that the ice cream was melting, though. Adding some appropriate texture for ice cream or clarifying that it's frozen yogurt would be nice. Also, many of the colors are of the same value key. Squint, and there isn't quite enough contrast.
ReplyDeleteI like the attention to the desert- it looks very appetizing- I want to see more vibrant colors/ contrast and more of the picture- i feel like I'm missing part of the story. Still good work!
ReplyDeleteThis is an incredibly lifelike yet tender moment, and you captured it like a snapshot. The tiny illustration is cropped really well, and it feels like the two lovebirds are carrying on a conversation when you're not looking at them. I like that you didn't shy away from warm browns and pinks, because sometimes when it comes to illustrating desserts people go jewel-toned very fast.
ReplyDeleteadding to everyone else's thoughts-- id just get rid of the woman's face entirely. Its such a sweet (no pun intended) idea and the sharing of food is already intimate-- you don't put a spoon into a dish with someone else's spoon if you don't like them, so her expression (which I think is meant to seem dreamy) isn't needed. I love the warmth of the piece. Maybe just a few shifts in color would help so its not all so fleshy colored? If you were doing it over again, i think it could be cropped a little more interestingly (the bottom of the glass being cut off, but still reading at flat-- instead of seeing the rounded ellipse that the base would have on the table) is confusing my eye, for example.
ReplyDeleteBut I really like it and it would be a very nice card.
I definitely do agree with what was said above.
ReplyDeleteThis is so sweet, and the colors that you used help play it up so well!
Having the hands in there only can really mess around with such a simple composition and piece.
Which I think would fit perfectly with this!
I do agree with the bowl being flattened out a little bit.
So maybe simply making it a shorter stem on the bowl, and bringing the ellipse up higher will help it stand on its own.
Otherwise so very warming! Which they'll need because ice cream is so cold!