This is cute, so the girl gets an ice cream from a secret admirer. I really like the way you drew the characters and also a good choice to not add in the admirer! It makes it seem like it could be anyone! The composition in this piece is strong. I wish that you would have spent more time on the curtains in the back, they look a little unfinished because of the blocky coloring, but fix those curtains and I think this piece would be really really strong!!
Cute idea and nice colored lines, however I'm not sure what's exactly happening here. It appears that the waiter is gesturing to the person who sent her the ice cream and shes blushing. The idea can get sort of lost and one can start to wonder if hes hitting on her while shes supposed to be on a date with someone else maybe? The characters are really nice and their expressions are cute, i'd just spend a little more time making sure your colors are really well applied, seeing as they got a bit washy in some places. Cute color scheme, though!
At first I thought she was being hit on as well. I think that maybe it doesn't quite seem like the waiter and the girl are looking in the same place? It might help if her head were turned more. Really well drawn though and I like the use of the pink outline, it definitely works to your advantage in terms of the assignment.
I like the idea of getting ice cream from someone instead of cocktail or other kinds of drinks. it is SWEET. also, I love the colors you used in the piece. I wonder though, since she is looking directly at the viewers, i hope the server also points his finger toward us so that whoever look at this image feel like she/he is the one who gives her a ice cream? and maybe darken the background little bit more to give more contrast between the background and the foreground
The outlines really work in this piece. I think the curtains in the back would benefit from a little more work. The hair is really nice with the way you worked in planes. The concept is a little confusing however.
I think it is really cute idea. Your color choice of the piece is really good. Love the purple outline on the female. I do think there should be more contrast. Right now everything seems to be at the mid- tone. I think if you push the darkness. Also the eye direction of the guy and the eye direction of the female are different. I think you fix that so it looks like they are looking at the same person.
I think the sketch itself is nicely done. I understand that the curtains are in the way back and loses detail, but I think a little bit of detail wouldn't hurt. The table and chairs also might need more shadows to make it look more three dimensional. I love your use of curvy lines in your drawing, giving it a comfortable mood. The color of her dress helps bring her out and give focus to her.
This is a cute piece. I'm not sure I'm a fan of the outlines that you chose to put around everything. I feel like the piece as a whole just needs that next step with the contrast. It's feeling a little washed out for me. I realize that's hard to do with watercolor, as it takes forever to keep layering colors, but maybe try applying some colors without much water in the brush to keep the pigments from spreading out and becoming a wash.
The concept is really cute, I think what might help to make it more readable would be drawing more attention to the note she holding so our eyes do not have to search for clues.
that is cute! I found out that you used different colored lines. That is successful. Red line is more visible than blue. Also no line work on the backgound is a smart technique. But I think you used too much washs with watercolor. Controlling the water can be helpful.
I really like the concept of the secret admirer. The colors in the foreground are really nice, but I wish those curtains were a little less muddy. I also love the colored pen outlines, they really help pull the woman into view and push the man behind her.
Great color and style, it all looks really romantic. But I have no idea who the girl is after? The waiter? Us? Or another person? Either way, she looks lovely enough to get anyone. Anyways, I like the concept and idea of this. There's some little perspective problems but they're easily fixable.Overall, cute.
I like the concept, but ultimately this piece and its narrative are a little unclear. It's hard to tell who the man is because of how he's dressed and they way he's positioned. I can't really tell if he's the one who gave her the ice cream, or he's pointing to the person who gave her the ice cream, or if she got stood up and he's trying to show her out , you get the idea. I'm assuming he's the one who gave it to her. Some more context and clarity regarding the situation and environment would be useful.
I'm also torn on the pen marks you used. I understand what you were trying to do, but I think the blue on the man is much less successful than the pink on the girl, because it doesn't match the overall feel of the piece and instead looks is if it were preliminary lifework you didn't erase at the end.
Nice composition and line work. I like the idea of the waiter being the messenger who delivered her the treat- its a little off putting that she is looking directly at the viewer instead of the gifter tho- I want to see more of an expression as well. Don't use blue ink either- its a nice experiment- but black works better
I can see the happiness on the woman's face. I wish there is more detail on her to make focus. but I like that you made difference between the woman and the guy with background. I like to see the background simple and also like the different color of pen work for outline.
I really love how soft and romantic the colors in this piece are! It's very calming.
The use of line is very restrained and careful ; i think it might be interesting to play more with weight, go crazy!
Some of the wash spots in the piece have really visible tiny stroke marks, so it might be a good idea to consider doing a second coat to avoid that texture.
This is very cute and very Valentines Day without being cliche. Everything is pretty nicely handled, especially the woman's expression.For me, her mouth sells her reaction to the situation. I would be careful of using such a bright pen in a scene with subdued colors. I also think it takes some time for eyes to separate the gift tag from the book below it.
I can definitely see that you took my critiques into account. I enjoy the way that you handled and applied your colors in the background, muting them to bring our focus to the front. I'd like to see some of that to help bring out the tag that she's holding in her hand. I feel like it's an important aspect of the narrative that needs to be somewhat known. There are a few parts that feel a bit stiff, the figures limbs and hands, and the items on the table are a bit static compared to the rest of the piece. Utilize those warms and blue tones.
I agree with everything else thats been said-- a little clearer indication of where they are both looking and more OOMF in the foreground would be great. Its a sweet idea and a good start, but still looks unfinished (even though its finished) because the color is thin and mostly generic/ washy/ local. It needs a few more layers and little less stiffness in the rendering and the color/ line application.
This is cute, so the girl gets an ice cream from a secret admirer. I really like the way you drew the characters and also a good choice to not add in the admirer! It makes it seem like it could be anyone! The composition in this piece is strong. I wish that you would have spent more time on the curtains in the back, they look a little unfinished because of the blocky coloring, but fix those curtains and I think this piece would be really really strong!!
ReplyDeleteCute idea and nice colored lines, however I'm not sure what's exactly happening here. It appears that the waiter is gesturing to the person who sent her the ice cream and shes blushing. The idea can get sort of lost and one can start to wonder if hes hitting on her while shes supposed to be on a date with someone else maybe? The characters are really nice and their expressions are cute, i'd just spend a little more time making sure your colors are really well applied, seeing as they got a bit washy in some places. Cute color scheme, though!
ReplyDeleteAt first I thought she was being hit on as well. I think that maybe it doesn't quite seem like the waiter and the girl are looking in the same place? It might help if her head were turned more. Really well drawn though and I like the use of the pink outline, it definitely works to your advantage in terms of the assignment.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of getting ice cream from someone instead of cocktail or other kinds of drinks. it is SWEET. also, I love the colors you used in the piece. I wonder though, since she is looking directly at the viewers, i hope the server also points his finger toward us so that whoever look at this image feel like she/he is the one who gives her a ice cream? and maybe darken the background little bit more to give more contrast between the background and the foreground
ReplyDeleteThe outlines really work in this piece. I think the curtains in the back would benefit from a little more work. The hair is really nice with the way you worked in planes. The concept is a little confusing however.
ReplyDeleteI think it is really cute idea. Your color choice of the piece is really good. Love the purple outline on the female. I do think there should be more contrast. Right now everything seems to be at the mid- tone. I think if you push the darkness. Also the eye direction of the guy and the eye direction of the female are different. I think you fix that so it looks like they are looking at the same person.
ReplyDeleteI think the sketch itself is nicely done. I understand that the curtains are in the way back and loses detail, but I think a little bit of detail wouldn't hurt. The table and chairs also might need more shadows to make it look more three dimensional. I love your use of curvy lines in your drawing, giving it a comfortable mood. The color of her dress helps bring her out and give focus to her.
ReplyDeleteThis is a cute piece. I'm not sure I'm a fan of the outlines that you chose to put around everything. I feel like the piece as a whole just needs that next step with the contrast. It's feeling a little washed out for me. I realize that's hard to do with watercolor, as it takes forever to keep layering colors, but maybe try applying some colors without much water in the brush to keep the pigments from spreading out and becoming a wash.
ReplyDeleteThe concept is really cute, I think what might help to make it more readable would be drawing more attention to the note she holding so our eyes do not have to search for clues.
ReplyDeletethat is cute! I found out that you used different colored lines. That is successful. Red line is more visible than blue. Also no line work on the backgound is a smart technique. But I think you used too much washs with watercolor. Controlling the water can be helpful.
ReplyDeleteI really like the concept of the secret admirer. The colors in the foreground are really nice, but I wish those curtains were a little less muddy. I also love the colored pen outlines, they really help pull the woman into view and push the man behind her.
ReplyDeleteGreat color and style, it all looks really romantic. But I have no idea who the girl is after? The waiter? Us? Or another person? Either way, she looks lovely enough to get anyone. Anyways, I like the concept and idea of this. There's some little perspective problems but they're easily fixable.Overall, cute.
ReplyDeleteI like the concept, but ultimately this piece and its narrative are a little unclear. It's hard to tell who the man is because of how he's dressed and they way he's positioned. I can't really tell if he's the one who gave her the ice cream, or he's pointing to the person who gave her the ice cream, or if she got stood up and he's trying to show her out , you get the idea. I'm assuming he's the one who gave it to her. Some more context and clarity regarding the situation and environment would be useful.
ReplyDeleteI'm also torn on the pen marks you used. I understand what you were trying to do, but I think the blue on the man is much less successful than the pink on the girl, because it doesn't match the overall feel of the piece and instead looks is if it were preliminary lifework you didn't erase at the end.
Nice composition and line work. I like the idea of the waiter being the messenger who delivered her the treat- its a little off putting that she is looking directly at the viewer instead of the gifter tho- I want to see more of an expression as well. Don't use blue ink either- its a nice experiment- but black works better
ReplyDeleteI can see the happiness on the woman's face. I wish there is more detail on her to make focus. but I like that you made difference between the woman and the guy with background. I like to see the background simple and also like the different color of pen work for outline.
ReplyDeleteI really love how soft and romantic the colors in this piece are! It's very calming.
ReplyDeleteThe use of line is very restrained and careful ; i think it might be interesting to play more with weight, go crazy!
Some of the wash spots in the piece have really visible tiny stroke marks, so it might be a good idea to consider doing a second coat to avoid that texture.
This is very cute and very Valentines Day without being cliche. Everything is pretty nicely handled, especially the woman's expression.For me, her mouth sells her reaction to the situation. I would be careful of using such a bright pen in a scene with subdued colors. I also think it takes some time for eyes to separate the gift tag from the book below it.
ReplyDeleteI can definitely see that you took my critiques into account. I enjoy the way that you handled and applied your colors in the background, muting them to bring our focus to the front. I'd like to see some of that to help bring out the tag that she's holding in her hand. I feel like it's an important aspect of the narrative that needs to be somewhat known.
ReplyDeleteThere are a few parts that feel a bit stiff, the figures limbs and hands, and the items on the table are a bit static compared to the rest of the piece. Utilize those warms and blue tones.
I agree with everything else thats been said-- a little clearer indication of where they are both looking and more OOMF in the foreground would be great. Its a sweet idea and a good start, but still looks unfinished (even though its finished) because the color is thin and mostly generic/ washy/ local. It needs a few more layers and little less stiffness in the rendering and the color/ line application.
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