I'm a little confused by the guys expression in this piece because he is smiling but he doesn't seem to be enjoying himself his eye expression stares blank for me. I feel that this piece could be stronger too if you had the girl at a profile view and turned the guy to more of a three quarter view or turned him to the front, that way it would be easier to tell what his expression is and what reaction I should be getting to this piece.
I like the idea of woman kissing on the man's cheek. It is very simple yet I can sense her love towards man. However, I think you should fix the eye angle of the man. He seems like he is looking at something behind the woman, not the woman. Also, rather than drawing her fingers straight, it would be more realistic if you draw it angled.
The woman's neck seems really long, which could easily be fixed by the placement of the shoulder. Also her hair seems a bit flat, and the light source is kind of unclear/inconsistent. I do enjoy the moments where her hair begins to curl, it's a nice decorative touch.
I'm really liking the loving, almost lustful expressions in their faces. It gives it a very steamy, secretive vibe to it, as though the two of them are forbidden from seeing each other, or have wanted each other for some time.
Couple things is that the light source is a bit confusing because there are some ares where one would think a s shadow would go where there isn't one, and also in some places the anatomy is become slightly off, which is easily fixable.
I love the contrast you gave between the background and the foreground. it makes two main character really popping out. I am little confused with guy's expression though, if it is a valentine day card, should' he be happy? maybe you could put blush on his cheek to make hime looks like he is a shy guy.
I'm a little confused about the expression of the guy. Maybe if his eyes were closed? I also think it'd be nice to see what you did with the curls to the rest of the hair. It'd really push this piece more.
It looks like a kiss of death, like: The girl almost looks sad while the guys looks... Dead. But overall, I like your style, it's very pretty. The girl's hair is very captive. Her neck seems a little long but somehow it didn't bother me. Great coloring on their skins, maybe add a blush on their faces could make this situation seem more romantic?
I like the concept that a girl is kissing to her lover. but the illustration looks like the "forbbiden love" or something dangerous. the color pallette is little bit scary. I want to see romances on your piece. I think the different color palettes will help you. Also boy's eye is an issue. He looks like he took some dangerous drugs like marijuara.
This piece is really simple but delicate and beautiful, I definitely get the sense of love from the guy, I do wish I got a little more expression from the girl, otherwise I would suggest adding a pop of color or more texture in the hair, well done.
I like the use of a limited palette and is dark background, however I feel the girls hair become to muddy and the strands of hair become difficult to read and distracts the viewer. Where though her face is abstracted. its a very attractive face. the man however I feel his expression becomes lost and contrasts the women to much. But the piece is very good the use of color and the anatomy of the face of the women is beautifully handled.
Use references next time. The profile view of the characters is really, really stiff, and coming off as pretty flat. I think they'd benefit from being drawn in a three quarter view next time to give them more dimensions which will make it harder to make them look flat.
Also slow down next time. Take your time. From the looks of your lines being all jagged you can tell that you were putting them down fast in a sketchier manner. Just take your time and you'll have lines that aren't so stiff and sketchy. Make each line count!
I am a little confused with this illustration. The woman looks sad and the man looks content. The man looks like it is drawn in the position like one of the Egyptian men drawn on a wall. I wish there were more hints of how they are standing, or either just show their faces. I appreciate the line work you've done on the woman's hair.
I like the idea of the woman kissing the guys cheek. It seems like a very intimate steamy scene. But I would have to agree with everyone on the guys expression, he doesn't seem focused on her at all. How you colored the skin is very nice, but I wish the woman's hair was a different color or at least at something other than grey added to it.
I like the intimate view of this. As others have said, it doesn't sell love as well as it could because of the man's expression and stagnant position. Maybe having him look at the woman or close his eyes would be better. Also, I'm confused by the man's hair at the top but I weirdly like it. It goes with your interesting linework. I would love to see this patchiness and contrast brought into the woman's hair.
I like how you have a limited palette, with just blacks, grays and pinks. It creates drama in the piece. However, this doesn't look really feel valentine's to me but something much more sexual and dark. I'm also confused about the light top on this head. Are those her hands because there's some pink on it?
nice idea and I like the negative shapes that result in the two people meeting. I want to see more contrast and more of the man's face- it looks like he is getting cut off.
I like the composition of this piece a lot: it's so striking. I just think the piece as a whole needs...more? More attention to detail in the facial features/hair and skin would really help clinch the concept of love instead of one that's more sexual.
alex-- a good lesson here: if you're gonna go simple, you have to nail every element of the piece… or it complicates it. I agree with everyone else in terms of the actual drawing of the figures. They seem just slightly off reality (but like the sketch version of the guy with the giant hair, they're not SO far off reality that we know for certain its purposeful). You can stylize, but you need to be consistent. His expression IS weird.
I think as a Valentine, it would be more successful if it was slightly less sexual. I like the sweetness of a kiss on the cheek. Maybe they need a hint of clothing?
Again, think of this as a cover to a card with no punchline inside.
in terms of rendering- the limited palette is great, but the execution is muddy. I think doing something stylistically more like Mucha and really pushing off of those swirling tresses and interesting negative space between them-- clean and linear with flat, clean color would've helped.
I like that you show a woman and a man in complete side. it looks simple. but I wish there is more information in illustration like background. and if there is more contrast on her hair, it would be nicer.
This piece is something that will definitely speak to a lot of romantics out there, but as previously mentioned...I'm not sure in the right way? I really like the idea that Dana suggested of the Mucha style. With the way that you have her hair wrapping around the piece, it could really help to make her a lovely lady "wrapping" him in her love. Giving the gentlemen a more sensitive expression such as a little embarrassed blush or a look of mild surprise could help turn this into something a little less sexual. But there's are little things here and there that can make this piece something so touching, intimate, but not overly so.
I'm a little confused by the guys expression in this piece because he is smiling but he doesn't seem to be enjoying himself his eye expression stares blank for me. I feel that this piece could be stronger too if you had the girl at a profile view and turned the guy to more of a three quarter view or turned him to the front, that way it would be easier to tell what his expression is and what reaction I should be getting to this piece.
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ReplyDeleteI like the idea of woman kissing on the man's cheek. It is very simple yet I can sense her love towards man. However, I think you should fix the eye angle of the man. He seems like he is looking at something behind the woman, not the woman. Also, rather than drawing her fingers straight, it would be more realistic if you draw it angled.
ReplyDeleteThe woman's neck seems really long, which could easily be fixed by the placement of the shoulder. Also her hair seems a bit flat, and the light source is kind of unclear/inconsistent. I do enjoy the moments where her hair begins to curl, it's a nice decorative touch.
ReplyDeleteI'm really liking the loving, almost lustful expressions in their faces. It gives it a very steamy, secretive vibe to it, as though the two of them are forbidden from seeing each other, or have wanted each other for some time.
ReplyDeleteCouple things is that the light source is a bit confusing because there are some ares where one would think a s shadow would go where there isn't one, and also in some places the anatomy is become slightly off, which is easily fixable.
I love the contrast you gave between the background and the foreground. it makes two main character really popping out. I am little confused with guy's expression though, if it is a valentine day card, should' he be happy? maybe you could put blush on his cheek to make hime looks like he is a shy guy.
ReplyDeleteI'm a little confused about the expression of the guy. Maybe if his eyes were closed? I also think it'd be nice to see what you did with the curls to the rest of the hair. It'd really push this piece more.
ReplyDeleteIt looks like a kiss of death, like: The girl almost looks sad while the guys looks... Dead.
ReplyDeleteBut overall, I like your style, it's very pretty. The girl's hair is very captive. Her neck seems a little long but somehow it didn't bother me. Great coloring on their skins, maybe add a blush on their faces could make this situation seem more romantic?
I like the concept that a girl is kissing to her lover. but the illustration looks like the "forbbiden love" or something dangerous. the color pallette is little bit scary. I want to see romances on your piece. I think the different color palettes will help you. Also boy's eye is an issue. He looks like he took some dangerous drugs like marijuara.
ReplyDeleteThis piece is really simple but delicate and beautiful, I definitely get the sense of love from the guy, I do wish I got a little more expression from the girl, otherwise I would suggest adding a pop of color or more texture in the hair, well done.
ReplyDeleteI like the use of a limited palette and is dark background, however I feel the girls hair become to muddy and the strands of hair become difficult to read and distracts the viewer. Where though her face is abstracted. its a very attractive face. the man however I feel his expression becomes lost and contrasts the women to much. But the piece is very good the use of color and the anatomy of the face of the women is beautifully handled.
ReplyDeleteUse references next time. The profile view of the characters is really, really stiff, and coming off as pretty flat. I think they'd benefit from being drawn in a three quarter view next time to give them more dimensions which will make it harder to make them look flat.
ReplyDeleteAlso slow down next time. Take your time. From the looks of your lines being all jagged you can tell that you were putting them down fast in a sketchier manner. Just take your time and you'll have lines that aren't so stiff and sketchy. Make each line count!
I am a little confused with this illustration. The woman looks sad and the man looks content. The man looks like it is drawn in the position like one of the Egyptian men drawn on a wall. I wish there were more hints of how they are standing, or either just show their faces. I appreciate the line work you've done on the woman's hair.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of the woman kissing the guys cheek. It seems like a very intimate steamy scene. But I would have to agree with everyone on the guys expression, he doesn't seem focused on her at all. How you colored the skin is very nice, but I wish the woman's hair was a different color or at least at something other than grey added to it.
ReplyDeleteI like the intimate view of this. As others have said, it doesn't sell love as well as it could because of the man's expression and stagnant position. Maybe having him look at the woman or close his eyes would be better. Also, I'm confused by the man's hair at the top but I weirdly like it. It goes with your interesting linework. I would love to see this patchiness and contrast brought into the woman's hair.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have a limited palette, with just blacks, grays and pinks. It creates drama in the piece.
ReplyDeleteHowever, this doesn't look really feel valentine's to me but something much more sexual and dark.
I'm also confused about the light top on this head. Are those her hands because there's some pink on it?
nice idea and I like the negative shapes that result in the two people meeting. I want to see more contrast and more of the man's face- it looks like he is getting cut off.
ReplyDeleteI like the composition of this piece a lot: it's so striking. I just think the piece as a whole needs...more? More attention to detail in the facial features/hair and skin would really help clinch the concept of love instead of one that's more sexual.
ReplyDeletealex-- a good lesson here: if you're gonna go simple, you have to nail every element of the piece… or it complicates it. I agree with everyone else in terms of the actual drawing of the figures. They seem just slightly off reality (but like the sketch version of the guy with the giant hair, they're not SO far off reality that we know for certain its purposeful). You can stylize, but you need to be consistent. His expression IS weird.
ReplyDeleteI think as a Valentine, it would be more successful if it was slightly less sexual. I like the sweetness of a kiss on the cheek. Maybe they need a hint of clothing?
Again, think of this as a cover to a card with no punchline inside.
in terms of rendering- the limited palette is great, but the execution is muddy. I think doing something stylistically more like Mucha and really pushing off of those swirling tresses and interesting negative space between them-- clean and linear with flat, clean color would've helped.
I like that you show a woman and a man in complete side. it looks simple. but I wish there is more information in illustration like background. and if there is more contrast on her hair, it would be nicer.
ReplyDeleteThis piece is something that will definitely speak to a lot of romantics out there, but as previously mentioned...I'm not sure in the right way?
ReplyDeleteI really like the idea that Dana suggested of the Mucha style. With the way that you have her hair wrapping around the piece, it could really help to make her a lovely lady "wrapping" him in her love.
Giving the gentlemen a more sensitive expression such as a little embarrassed blush or a look of mild surprise could help turn this into something a little less sexual.
But there's are little things here and there that can make this piece something so touching, intimate, but not overly so.