This is a very cheerful piece, your concept is adorable with the shark giving the pearl to what I think is a sailor, but also looks like it has tentacles my only critic would be it's hard to tell what the creature is in the foreground. I think maybe if it was less of a silhouette it would be easier to see. I do like the way you handled the water, very interesting mark making!
Your characters are beautiful! I really enjoy the concept as a whole. The pirate in the foreground could either have a hook hand or a tentacle, which changes the meaning immensely. If he were to have a hook hand: automatic pirate. Tentacle: now he's ALSO a creature of the deep just like the giant purple shark and the love isn't quite as unlikely. His coloration is also super heavy and not very attractive against all of the beautiful bright colors in the rest of the piece! I understand that that's supposed to be a pearl and oyster, however the pearl is huge and a little egg shaped so it's confusing as to what the offering is, plus the top of the shell is much smaller than the bottom, making the bottom appear to be part of the shark's mouth.
I think this has a very nice graphic sensibility to it. It is clean, and simple, which is nice. I feel that the color palette could be a bit more developed however. The water and sky are very primary, and I feel as though the silhouette in the foreground could stand to change colors, because it seems disjointed from the piece. I would suggest further layering colors or going completely flat with them because it seems a bit in the middle.
I love how you use the limited color palette to depict the characters in this piece. the facial expression of the share is very cute, with a wink and a pearl. however, I hope to see more details for the foreground character since it is little hard to tell how this foreground character feels about shark's proposal. maybe thinking about changing his posture? overall, very nice character and color!
I like the fun graphic quality of this piece. I thought the way you did the water was interesting. Maybe lightening the pirate in the foreground up a bit? Or a different color palette, as it is extremely contrasting from the rest of the piece.
I love your use of color for the shark, sky, and water. However, I wish you could have given some color to the pirate. Is it supposedly a sand or rock figure? Also, I was confused whether the shark was holding the shell with the pearl or if the shark was eating the shell. Maybe a pair of fins holding the shell would help!
Took me a second to realize that it was a pirate figure in the foreground, but I knew it was an adorable situation right away. The shark (thingy) is really cute and well done. I really like the colors and textures of this piece, especially the water... Maybe make the shark less flat looking? Because it/she kind of look like a paper cutout compared to the shadows of the claw and pirate. Overall, I really like the concept and idea of this!
The coloring is adorable. I love it. I didn't know what the figure in the foreground was though until I read some of the other comments. You should really play up that hook hand, and put a parrot on his shoulder or draw a jolly roger on his hat to make it a little bit more obvious that we're looking at a pirate.
The handling of the shark though is fantastic. It's cute, quirky, and funny. I really love the texture that you got in the water as well!
First off I really love the textures that you used, the piece looks very graphic and at first I thought the shark was made out of cut paper from afar. The sailor/pirate guy gets a little lost to me, I didn't see him at first. Maybe if he wasn't a silhouette that would help, or if there was more highlights on him.
This is a very cute piece and the use of color is well done as well as the texture of the piece. however I am a liitle confused on the interaction of the characters. And so I am a little lost in the narrative. but the use of color is well handled and is a very pleasant illustration to look at.
I love the colors here! And all the textures you've added. It feels like pastel and watercolor. The shark is very cute. But there are some perspective issues with the nose. I know some illustrators like to force it like that but it still looks a little unnatural. The color of the pirate doesn't seem to match the overall color scheme of the piece. Instead of dark green, maybe use like a dark purple or blue.
I had to read the comments in order to discern what the figure in the foreground was and what exactly was happening between the two of them. I love the textures and colors you used. I get a sense of puppy love, almost and it helps that it seems like something one would see i a children's book.
The pirate isn't doing much for me, because it stands out, but not a necessarily good way. It's earthy tones doesn't match the rest of the piece, and it also doesn't help that we can't really tell how it feels and what it's even doing. I feel like it could be better resolved if it's colors were brightened and features defined a bit more.
I like the cute shark character and your color on it but I am a little bit confused on the silhouette character on the right. I think the texture and watercolor on the sky makes the piece more harmonious not too simple not too complicated.
Nice colors and textures in the water- The silhouette of the pirate doesn't read as well- ( at first I wasn't sure of what the figure was) Maybe use another tone( the color is just too muddy) and minor highlights on the edge since the light source is coming from in front of him.
I love the color of the shark. I also like the texture of red outline. For me the pearl looks like an egg. You should make it rounder (not long circle.) I think the figure in the front should be bigger, since it is at the front. I did not have trouble defining the figure because of the hook.
This is adorable, but it took me a while to really "get" the concept. There's a lot going on, and the silhouette of the pirate/davy jones guy is hard to discern from the patterns and cut shapes of the foreground. I really love the use of the watercolor blots in the sunset background; there's a lot of nice contrast here.
I think the characters are really great but I'm not sure they fit so well together. I suppose that's part of the premise. But I first read this piece as commentary on unrequitted love. Maybe adding something bright or cheerful to the pirate character would help show that he loves the gift and/or shark. I also am a bit confused by the perspective on the clam's upper lid. Maybe a shadow on the water would help indicate that the shell is protruding?
Clara, this turned our so very cute! I really do enjoy the way that you played with different flatter surfaces and the textured pieces. Your use of the cute and unconventional colors definitely worked to your benefit.
Because I am so very happy with your colors, unfortunately I'm sad that the figure in the foreground ends up being so different in color. While I've very interested in this character, its silhouette alone is very interesting (is it an octopus man? or a man with tentacles?). This silhouette might need a bit more clarity to it, but I think that it should be a different color. Something warmer that will bring it out away from the water, but not something too out of line with the other colors that you have placed.
The shark has a flower in its not-hair hair. So cheerful and smart. But it does seem like we're all having trouble with the male character-- I think you want it to be a pirate with a hook hand, so i'd clarify that for sure. Also, be careful about the darkness of that silhouette-- Amanda's suggestions on how are very good.
You've got a lot of great feedback here. Easy fixes!
This is a very cheerful piece, your concept is adorable with the shark giving the pearl to what I think is a sailor, but also looks like it has tentacles my only critic would be it's hard to tell what the creature is in the foreground. I think maybe if it was less of a silhouette it would be easier to see. I do like the way you handled the water, very interesting mark making!
ReplyDeleteYour characters are beautiful! I really enjoy the concept as a whole. The pirate in the foreground could either have a hook hand or a tentacle, which changes the meaning immensely. If he were to have a hook hand: automatic pirate. Tentacle: now he's ALSO a creature of the deep just like the giant purple shark and the love isn't quite as unlikely. His coloration is also super heavy and not very attractive against all of the beautiful bright colors in the rest of the piece! I understand that that's supposed to be a pearl and oyster, however the pearl is huge and a little egg shaped so it's confusing as to what the offering is, plus the top of the shell is much smaller than the bottom, making the bottom appear to be part of the shark's mouth.
ReplyDeleteHeads up this piece is still in the scanner!
ReplyDeleteI think this has a very nice graphic sensibility to it. It is clean, and simple, which is nice. I feel that the color palette could be a bit more developed however. The water and sky are very primary, and I feel as though the silhouette in the foreground could stand to change colors, because it seems disjointed from the piece. I would suggest further layering colors or going completely flat with them because it seems a bit in the middle.
ReplyDeleteI love how you use the limited color palette to depict the characters in this piece. the facial expression of the share is very cute, with a wink and a pearl. however, I hope to see more details for the foreground character since it is little hard to tell how this foreground character feels about shark's proposal. maybe thinking about changing his posture? overall, very nice character and color!
ReplyDeleteI like the fun graphic quality of this piece. I thought the way you did the water was interesting. Maybe lightening the pirate in the foreground up a bit? Or a different color palette, as it is extremely contrasting from the rest of the piece.
ReplyDeleteI love your use of color for the shark, sky, and water. However, I wish you could have given some color to the pirate. Is it supposedly a sand or rock figure? Also, I was confused whether the shark was holding the shell with the pearl or if the shark was eating the shell. Maybe a pair of fins holding the shell would help!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy all the textures in this piece, they are really interesting and the concept is really clear and cute as well.
ReplyDeleteTook me a second to realize that it was a pirate figure in the foreground, but I knew it was an adorable situation right away. The shark (thingy) is really cute and well done. I really like the colors and textures of this piece, especially the water... Maybe make the shark less flat looking? Because it/she kind of look like a paper cutout compared to the shadows of the claw and pirate. Overall, I really like the concept and idea of this!
ReplyDeleteThe coloring is adorable. I love it. I didn't know what the figure in the foreground was though until I read some of the other comments. You should really play up that hook hand, and put a parrot on his shoulder or draw a jolly roger on his hat to make it a little bit more obvious that we're looking at a pirate.
ReplyDeleteThe handling of the shark though is fantastic. It's cute, quirky, and funny. I really love the texture that you got in the water as well!
First off I really love the textures that you used, the piece looks very graphic and at first I thought the shark was made out of cut paper from afar. The sailor/pirate guy gets a little lost to me, I didn't see him at first. Maybe if he wasn't a silhouette that would help, or if there was more highlights on him.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very cute piece and the use of color is well done as well as the texture of the piece. however I am a liitle confused on the interaction of the characters. And so I am a little lost in the narrative. but the use of color is well handled and is a very pleasant illustration to look at.
ReplyDeleteI love the colors here! And all the textures you've added. It feels like pastel and watercolor.
ReplyDeleteThe shark is very cute. But there are some perspective issues with the nose. I know some illustrators like to force it like that but it still looks a little unnatural.
The color of the pirate doesn't seem to match the overall color scheme of the piece. Instead of dark green, maybe use like a dark purple or blue.
I had to read the comments in order to discern what the figure in the foreground was and what exactly was happening between the two of them. I love the textures and colors you used. I get a sense of puppy love, almost and it helps that it seems like something one would see i a children's book.
ReplyDeleteThe pirate isn't doing much for me, because it stands out, but not a necessarily good way. It's earthy tones doesn't match the rest of the piece, and it also doesn't help that we can't really tell how it feels and what it's even doing. I feel like it could be better resolved if it's colors were brightened and features defined a bit more.
I like the cute shark character and your color on it but I am a little bit confused on the silhouette character on the right.
ReplyDeleteI think the texture and watercolor on the sky makes the piece more harmonious not too simple not too complicated.
Nice colors and textures in the water- The silhouette of the pirate doesn't read as well- ( at first I wasn't sure of what the figure was) Maybe use another tone( the color is just too muddy) and minor highlights on the edge since the light source is coming from in front of him.
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ReplyDeleteI love the color of the shark. I also like the texture of red outline. For me the pearl looks like an egg. You should make it rounder (not long circle.) I think the figure in the front should be bigger, since it is at the front. I did not have trouble defining the figure because of the hook.
This is adorable, but it took me a while to really "get" the concept. There's a lot going on, and the silhouette of the pirate/davy jones guy is hard to discern from the patterns and cut shapes of the foreground. I really love the use of the watercolor blots in the sunset background; there's a lot of nice contrast here.
ReplyDeleteI think the characters are really great but I'm not sure they fit so well together. I suppose that's part of the premise. But I first read this piece as commentary on unrequitted love. Maybe adding something bright or cheerful to the pirate character would help show that he loves the gift and/or shark. I also am a bit confused by the perspective on the clam's upper lid. Maybe a shadow on the water would help indicate that the shell is protruding?
ReplyDeleteClara, this turned our so very cute!
ReplyDeleteI really do enjoy the way that you played with different flatter surfaces and the textured pieces.
Your use of the cute and unconventional colors definitely worked to your benefit.
Because I am so very happy with your colors, unfortunately I'm sad that the figure in the foreground ends up being so different in color. While I've very interested in this character, its silhouette alone is very interesting (is it an octopus man? or a man with tentacles?). This silhouette might need a bit more clarity to it, but I think that it should be a different color. Something warmer that will bring it out away from the water, but not something too out of line with the other colors that you have placed.
Anyway, I'm ready for the shark/octopus wedding!
SUPER cute.
ReplyDeleteThe shark has a flower in its not-hair hair. So cheerful and smart. But it does seem like we're all having trouble with the male character-- I think you want it to be a pirate with a hook hand, so i'd clarify that for sure. Also, be careful about the darkness of that silhouette-- Amanda's suggestions on how are very good.
You've got a lot of great feedback here. Easy fixes!