your perspective in these are really good, especially in the bottom forrest scene, and so are the textures, like the stones in the dungeon. i'm slightly confused about whats actually in the dungeon though, at first glance it looked like a door but now it looks like an iron maiden
simple: I'd lose the mountains and go for a flat, almost featureless environment quiet: I'd expect the running water would make some sound vast: maybe show some distant object (like a mountain) over the horizon deadly: I like gothic feel, I would just make sure to use a strong contrast intimate: nice, I like the candles cluttered: I just may not be able to tell but how high is the grass (if it's long it adds to the cluttered feeling)
Overall compositions are good. But in value-wise you could have more clean and contrasted value. I would choose simple, vast and cluttered out of them.
Dedly, intimate, cluttered one is my favorite. I like the composition and unique perspective. One suggestion is that if you emphasize dramatic lighting on the deadly and intimate ones, it would work well more.
I like the technique of your sketches - very distinct. You could take a little more time refining them, though, to make them really clear.
Simple - Comparing this to the rest of your sketches, it does not appear visually more simple than them. I would do less.
Quiet - It's a good idea, but I think you need to push the quiet mood more. Figure out what about the scene makes it quiet - the brook? The tree? The colors? Try to emphasize the peace and muted nature of the scene by diluting contrast - that dark, gnarled tree is very loud as it stands.
Vast - I'm not feeling it - it's very straight-on and the horizon line is right in the middle of the page. You can only really feel "vast" if you have something as reference - in other words, something small. If you change the angle and make the ground very small and the sky very large, for example, you're a lot closer to invoking "vast".
Deadly - Dark and dingy, maybe, but not deadly yet, just somewhat threatening. You could add elements to this scene to make it more menacing.
Intimate - Zoom in closer! I had trouble figuring this one out at first. The bathtub is pretty much a block with a hole in it from this angle. For intimate we should really be in love with that bathtub and those candles.
Cluttered - This is a good idea! And it's getting there. Since you chose mushrooms, I would just grow mushrooms EVERYWHERE. Out of the grass, out of the trees, coming in the side, wherever you can get away with putting different kinds of mushrooms.
I think Deadly Cluttered and Intimate. Those three represent the words the best and I like the compositions of them the best as well, especially cluttered.
Cluttered is nice, I like the idea of natural clutter. Once I read that deadly was an iron maiden I agree that it would also be a good choice to do. I kind've get the feeling that your simple and vast could be switched though, in which case I would want you to do simple.
These are pretty rough but my favorites are simple, intimate, and cluttered. Simple has some lovely shapes happening and I am sure color would liven and enrich it. Intimate has some great lighting potential. As far as cluttered goes I think it would be neat to look at some floras and fungi and such to inform your drawing, maybe the trees not so evenly spaced, the vines more interesting and individual? Think about your compositions, I am not too hot on the centering of the bathtub and think you could do a lot more with the forest area. good luck
Simple, quiet and vast are all too similar for me, maybe change the perspectives on one or two? I also feel like deadly should have a little something more like maybe blood on the floor or a contraption with spikes somewhere. I really enjoy the playfulness and clarity of cluttered.
You're using a really cool rendering style in these, but it seems like it's getting tripped up a bit by the drawings. Especially when working with strange settings such as these, reference can be very important. Though subjects like these may be hard to find around here, any reference you can get might prove helpful.
I think vast is a little too simple and doesn't feel very vast, i think it needs more perspective. Cluttered, quiet, and intimate i think are the best at describing their word. I like how you used foliage to describe clutter, i think that was a good idea. I think the bridge in quiet needs to be moved more in the picture though so that you can see the path.
Quiet, intimate, and cluttered are my favorites in terms of execution. I too feel that simple and vast could easily be switched. Also, an iron maiden is great for deadly, so maybe work on a new composition?
you should make your sketches a little clearer by deveoping them a little more. its hard to tell exactly what they are sometimes. your ideas are really nice tho, i like intimate cluttered and quiet
1-looks more liek it should be vast instead of simple 2- good idea, id like to see it a little more rendered tho 3- this one looks more like what simple should have been. maybe just switch them around? 4-im having trouble figuring out what this is so maybe a little more detail would help 5-comunicates very wel but i think the bottom can be cropped 6- definitely looks cluttered. with a little more rendering this could be awesome
cluttered intimate and deadly are the three that I would choose because they all seem more realized and just overall better as a group. You might want to make sure that the bath tub doesnt end up looking like it has iron bars behind it in the final- But it might just be me making shit up.
your perspective in these are really good, especially in the bottom forrest scene, and so are the textures, like the stones in the dungeon. i'm slightly confused about whats actually in the dungeon though, at first glance it looked like a door but now it looks like an iron maiden
ReplyDeleteYeah, it's supposed to be an iron maiden. The spikes got a bit lost after I shaded them.
ReplyDeletesimple: I'd lose the mountains and go for a flat, almost featureless environment
ReplyDeletequiet: I'd expect the running water would make some sound
vast: maybe show some distant object (like a mountain) over the horizon
deadly: I like gothic feel, I would just make sure to use a strong contrast
intimate: nice, I like the candles
cluttered: I just may not be able to tell but how high is the grass (if it's long it adds to the cluttered feeling)
Overall compositions are good. But in value-wise you could have more clean and contrasted value. I would choose simple, vast and cluttered out of them.
ReplyDeleteDedly, intimate, cluttered one is my favorite. I like the composition and unique perspective. One suggestion is that if you emphasize dramatic lighting on the deadly and intimate ones, it would work well more.
ReplyDeleteI like the technique of your sketches - very distinct. You could take a little more time refining them, though, to make them really clear.
ReplyDeleteSimple - Comparing this to the rest of your sketches, it does not appear visually more simple than them. I would do less.
Quiet - It's a good idea, but I think you need to push the quiet mood more. Figure out what about the scene makes it quiet - the brook? The tree? The colors? Try to emphasize the peace and muted nature of the scene by diluting contrast - that dark, gnarled tree is very loud as it stands.
Vast - I'm not feeling it - it's very straight-on and the horizon line is right in the middle of the page. You can only really feel "vast" if you have something as reference - in other words, something small. If you change the angle and make the ground very small and the sky very large, for example, you're a lot closer to invoking "vast".
Deadly - Dark and dingy, maybe, but not deadly yet, just somewhat threatening. You could add elements to this scene to make it more menacing.
Intimate - Zoom in closer! I had trouble figuring this one out at first. The bathtub is pretty much a block with a hole in it from this angle. For intimate we should really be in love with that bathtub and those candles.
Cluttered - This is a good idea! And it's getting there. Since you chose mushrooms, I would just grow mushrooms EVERYWHERE. Out of the grass, out of the trees, coming in the side, wherever you can get away with putting different kinds of mushrooms.
i think the mountains in the first picture kind of look more like triangular blobs and difficult to interrupt
ReplyDeleteI think Deadly Cluttered and Intimate. Those three represent the words the best and I like the compositions of them the best as well, especially cluttered.
ReplyDeleteCluttered is nice, I like the idea of natural clutter. Once I read that deadly was an iron maiden I agree that it would also be a good choice to do. I kind've get the feeling that your simple and vast could be switched though, in which case I would want you to do simple.
ReplyDeleteThese are pretty rough but my favorites are simple, intimate, and cluttered. Simple has some lovely shapes happening and I am sure color would liven and enrich it. Intimate has some great lighting potential. As far as cluttered goes I think it would be neat to look at some floras and fungi and such to inform your drawing, maybe the trees not so evenly spaced, the vines more interesting and individual? Think about your compositions, I am not too hot on the centering of the bathtub and think you could do a lot more with the forest area. good luck
ReplyDeleteSimple, quiet and vast are all too similar for me, maybe change the perspectives on one or two? I also feel like deadly should have a little something more like maybe blood on the floor or a contraption with spikes somewhere. I really enjoy the playfulness and clarity of cluttered.
ReplyDeleteYou're using a really cool rendering style in these, but it seems like it's getting tripped up a bit by the drawings. Especially when working with strange settings such as these, reference can be very important. Though subjects like these may be hard to find around here, any reference you can get might prove helpful.
ReplyDeleteI think vast is a little too simple and doesn't feel very vast, i think it needs more perspective. Cluttered, quiet, and intimate i think are the best at describing their word. I like how you used foliage to describe clutter, i think that was a good idea. I think the bridge in quiet needs to be moved more in the picture though so that you can see the path.
ReplyDeleteQuiet, intimate, and cluttered are my favorites in terms of execution. I too feel that simple and vast could easily be switched. Also, an iron maiden is great for deadly, so maybe work on a new composition?
ReplyDeleteyou should make your sketches a little clearer by deveoping them a little more. its hard to tell exactly what they are sometimes. your ideas are really nice tho, i like intimate cluttered and quiet
ReplyDelete1-looks more liek it should be vast instead of simple
2- good idea, id like to see it a little more rendered tho
3- this one looks more like what simple should have been. maybe just switch them around?
4-im having trouble figuring out what this is so maybe a little more detail would help
5-comunicates very wel but i think the bottom can be cropped
6- definitely looks cluttered. with a little more rendering this could be awesome
i think vast, quiet and cluttered are probably the best. The perspective works well in these along with the lighting of the pieces
ReplyDeletecluttered intimate and deadly are the three that I would choose because they all seem more realized and just overall better as a group. You might want to make sure that the bath tub doesnt end up looking like it has iron bars behind it in the final- But it might just be me making shit up.
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